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Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists and not local people. Why is this the case? What can be done to attract local people? v.1

Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists and not local people. Why is this the case? What can be done to attract local people? v. 1
In the modern society where tourist has become one of the most popular lifestyles, individuals tend to visit museums and historical sites during their journeys. However, museums and places with historical value are less attractive to local residents. This essay will discuss the factors contributing to this trend before arriving at solutions. There are several driving forces behind the trend that local people visit museums and historical sites seldom. First and foremost, residents, more often than not, concisely understand their cities and feel less fresh when they have stayed in the cities for age. To put it another way, residents would like to travel to other cities for interacting with other cities’ people and immersing their lifestyles when they are on vacation. In addition, the revenues of museums and historical sites account for the most local tourism. Therefore, governments are pleased to invest money on advertising on these two places to attract travellers. With this premise, museums and historical site are more attractive to tourists rather than residents. With that said, some approaches can be adopted to promote locals’ attendance rate at buildings with historical values and museums. To begin with, the main solution is that governments should hold some activities, such as concerts and anniversaries, in these two areas to change the public’s perception of such places as sites for only monotonous activities. Moreover, the local media should public more articles and programs by introducing historical sites and museums with tremendous worth. In conclusion, historical areas and museums are less attractive to the local compared with tourists because residents are too familiar with their cities and cultures. In order to popularize these areas, governments should carry out more activities in these two areas and invest money on publicizing them on local media.
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museums
and
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historical
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sites
during their journeys.
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,
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museums
and places with
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historical
value are less attractive to
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local
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residents
. This essay will discuss the factors contributing to this trend
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before
arriving at solutions.

There are several driving forces behind the trend that
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local
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people
visit
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museums
and
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historical
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sites
seldom.
First
and foremost,
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residents
, more
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often
than not,
concisely
understand their
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cities
and feel less fresh when they have stayed in the
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cities
for age. To put it another way,
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residents
would like to travel to other
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cities
for interacting with other
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cities’
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people
and immersing their lifestyles when they are on vacation.
In addition
, the revenues of
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museums
and
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historical
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sites
account for the most
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local
tourism.
Therefore
,
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governments
are
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pleased
to invest money on advertising on these two places to attract
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travellers
. With this premise,
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museums
and
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historical
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site
are more attractive to tourists
rather
than residents.

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some
approaches can
be adopted
to promote
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locals’
attendance rate at buildings with
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historical
values and
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museums
. To
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begin
with, the main solution is that
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governments
should hold
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some
activities, such as concerts and anniversaries, in these two
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areas
to
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change
the public’s perception of such places as
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sites
for
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only
monotonous activities.
Moreover
, the
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local
media should public more articles and programs by introducing
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historical
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sites
and
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museums
with tremendous worth.

In conclusion
,
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historical
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and
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museums
are less attractive to the
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local
compared with tourists
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because
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residents
are too familiar with their
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cities
and cultures. In order to popularize these
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areas
,
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governments
should carry out more activities in these two
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areas
and invest money on publicizing them on
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local
media.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists and not local people. Why is this the case? What can be done to attract local people? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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