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giving too much attention for wild animals (agree or disagree)

giving too much attention for wild animals (agree or disagree) obAJg

Giving too much attention to and spending many resources for wild animals like birds are considered to be necessary for some people. For me, I completely agree with this people and so I will state the reasons for my view below. For the first place, we are in charge to protect the species on this planet, especially ones that are denoted about to be disappeared completely. To support this argument, we human beings are the smartest animal on the planet and also, the ones who exploit the planet and its resources the most. So, we have to keep the biodiversity for our planet well-being. If not, we are likely to face the shortage of food and resources as well as natural disasters like flooding because all living things are depending on each other in the way of mutual relationship. Moreover, it is vital to keep them to enjoy the art of the wildlife. Literally, animals, especially birds play an essential role in human arts, like poems, music, paintings and also they can entertain us. And some believed that they are the pills for numerous people to relief stress. Furthermore, dogs and cats would be mysterious animals for our young children. Some animals, in particular dogs are the best comrades for some old people. For more, they play a great role in medical field. For example, in America, people use rodents for biomedical research and some animals are necessary to develop new drugs and treatments. Besides, there are numerous animals that have directly contributed to numerous vital drugs. Therefore, animals are necessary for us ecologically, emotionally and medically as I have stated above. That is why today governments and authorities come to focus on animals' extinction more than before.

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many
 resources for wild You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
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 like birds are considered
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some
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people
. For me, I completely This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesce
agree
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people and
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so
 I will state the reasons for my view below.

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 place, we are in charge to protect the species on this You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsphereearthglobeworldasteroid
planet
, especially
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ones
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 about to be disappeared
 completely. To support this argument, we human beings are the smartest You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnaturalbodily
animal
 on the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsphereearthglobeworldasteroid
planet
 and also
, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsomeonewhoever
ones
 who exploit the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsphereearthglobeworldasteroid
planet
 and its resources the most. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
, we This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retain
keep
 the biodiversity for our You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsphereearthglobeworldasteroid
planet
 well-being. If not, we are likely to face the shortage of food and resources as well
 as natural disasters like flooding This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 all living things The verb 'depending' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
are depending
 on each other in the way of mutual relationship.

Moreover
, it is vital to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retain
keep
 them to enjoy the art of the wildlife. Literally
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
animals
, especially
 birds play an essential role in human arts, like poems, music, paintings and also
 they can entertain us. And This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 believed that they are the pills for numerous You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 to relief This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accentuate
stress
. Furthermore
, dogs and cats would be mysterious You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
animals
 for our young children. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
Some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
animals
, in particular
 dogs are the best comrades for This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ancientagedmature
old
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
.

For more, they play a great role in medical field. For example
, in America, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 rodents for biomedical research and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
animals
 are necessary to develop new drugs and treatments. Besides
, there are numerous You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
animals
 that have directly
 contributed to numerous vital drugs.

Therefore
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
animals
 are necessary for us ecologically
, emotionally
 and medically
 as I have stated above. That is
 why This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :this day and agenowadays
today
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritiespublic authorities
governments
 and authorities This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approacharrive
come
 to focus on animals' extinction more than This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
. 