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giving some advices to your foreign friend who will come to your hometown to study

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Thanks so much for your previous letter, I am jubilant to hear from you for such a long time that you are doing a good job on your learning journey. So, you got a chance to study in my town next year. Of course, I know this chance will not be easy, but don’t worry, I have some advice for you that you could contemplate ensuring your learning journey goes smoothly. Firstly, accommodation is an essential factor for foreign learners which could affect your life and learning result, so I highly recommend you to rent the Picky Motel which is nearby many bus stops, convenience stores, and the renting price is absolutely reasonable. Additionally, you sometimes have to pay for the fee, rent price, and school stationery at great expense. Therefore, finding a part-time job to be financially independent might be a good idea, you could apply to be an English teacher or a translator. These positions could help you to earn money to fulfill your cost of living. I also work as a teaching assistant so if you want I could introduce you to the manager so you can have an opportunity to get a vacancy. Eventually, I want to inform you that foreigners learning in Viet Nam do not only face financial problems but they also cope with language obstacles; especially when you join academic subjects. Taking a Vietnamese course at ‘’ Look at my nails ‘’ is beneficial since this center offers to learners many conventional to advanced lessons, Vietnamese vocabulary, and slang which are constantly updated. Moreover, you can both take ''Look At My Nails'' courses online and offline, which help you to save time and suit your study style. If you want to study, let’s have a look at LAMYVietnamese. com to apply for a course and study from now. I hope that all my advice could help you to solve your inquiry and reduce anxiety. I will be really happy if you could make studying time memorable and build up your relationship.
Thanks
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so
much for your previous letter, I am jubilant to hear from you for such a long time that you are doing a
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good
job on your
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learning
journey.
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So
, you
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got
a chance to
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study
in my town
next
year. Of
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course
, I know this chance will not be easy,
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but
don’t worry, I have
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some
advice for you that you could contemplate ensuring your
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learning
journey goes
smoothly
.
Firstly
, accommodation is an essential factor for foreign learners which could affect your life and
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learning
result,
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so
I
highly
recommend you to rent the Picky Motel which is nearby
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many
bus
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stops
, convenience stores, and the renting price is
absolutely
reasonable.
Additionally
, you
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sometimes
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have to
pay for the fee, rent price, and school stationery at great expense.
Therefore
, finding a part-time job to be
financially
independent might be a
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good
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
, you could apply to be an English teacher or a translator. These positions could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
you to earn money to fulfill your cost of living. I
also
work as a teaching assistant
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so
if you want I could introduce you to the manager
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
you can have an opportunity to
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get
a vacancy.
Eventually
, I want to inform you that foreigners
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learning
in
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Viet
Nam do not
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only
face financial problems
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but
they
also
cope with language obstacles;
especially
when you
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join
academic subjects. Taking a Vietnamese
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
at ‘’ Look at my nails ‘’ is beneficial since this center offers to learners
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
conventional to advanced lessons, Vietnamese vocabulary, and slang which are
constantly
updated.
Moreover
, you can both take ''Look At My Nails''
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
courses
online and offline, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
you to save time and suit your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
style. If you want to
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study
,
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let
’s have a look at
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LAMYVietnamese
.
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com
to apply for a
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course
and
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study
from
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now
. I hope that all my advice could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
you to solve your inquiry and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
anxiety. I will be
really
happy if you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
studying time memorable and build up your relationship.
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The joy of knowing a foreign language is inexpressible. I find it really difficult to express such joy in my mother tongue.
Munia Khan

IELTS essay giving some advices to your foreign friend who will come to your hometown to study

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1 paragraphs
338 words
5.5
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