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GIVING DETAIL INFORMATION OF CRIMES IN NEWSPAPER AND ON TELEVISION HAS BAD CONSEQUENCES. SOME SUGGEST THAT GOVERNMENT SHOULD IMPOSE SOME RESTRICTION ON THEM . WHAT EXTENT YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE.

GIVING DETAIL INFORMATION OF CRIMES IN NEWSPAPER AND ON TELEVISION HAS BAD CONSEQUENCES. SOME SUGGEST THAT GOVERNMENT SHOULD IMPOSE SOME RESTRICTION ON THEM. WHAT EXTENT YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE. pLMay
In this globalization, media has very crucial role in maintaining nation's peace, entertainment and social integrity. However, in recent times due to the high level of competition they are changes their focus over crucial issues such as crime, which may threatens nation's security. There are sundry crime shows telecasted on TV or in newspapers. The scenario started with CID before 15 years and followed by crime petrol, vardat, gumrah etc. There are numerous ways they provide details of crime. Firstly, by modust operandi where they duplicate the sequences happened at the time of crime. They presents this in such a manner that more and more people are attracted to the show. Secondly by discussing a case and the methods of investigation. To make it more realistic they involve forensic investigations into it. However, such activities resulted into bad consequences. Many people follow s the described techniques and does crime. Even they get an idea about investigation methods, so they takes extra precautions. Continuous telecast of rape cases, murder cases leaves deep impact into child's brain and many time results into criminal mentality. Additionally many people creates doubt to their relatives after watching such programs. The impacts are not limited to this, the criminals gets updated and latest information about their crime through media. Recently, in my country, police arrested most wanted thief from hotel while he was watching news related to his crime. Even the terrorist of 26/11 Mumbai attack, were getting latest information through news channel. This illustrate that it's high time for government to take some stringent action and ostracize such programs To recapitulate, I believe that, for high TRP and more profit, media has forgotten their role and government should restrict such programs for peace, safety and unity of nation.
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crucial role in maintaining nation's peace, entertainment and social integrity.
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due to the high level of competition they are
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their focus over crucial issues such as
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, which may threatens nation's security.

There are sundry
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crime
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shows
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with CID
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petrol,
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vardat
,
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where they duplicate the sequences happened at the
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of
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. They
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are attracted
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by discussing a case and the methods of investigation. To
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it more realistic they involve forensic investigations into it.

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crime
. Even they
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idea
about investigation methods,
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extra precautions. Continuous telecast of rape cases, murder cases
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leaves
deep impact into child's brain and
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results into criminal mentality.
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Additionally
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people
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creates
doubt to their relatives after watching such programs.

The impacts are not limited to this, the criminals
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gets
updated and latest information about their
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crime
through media. Recently, in my country, police arrested most wanted thief from hotel while he was watching news related to his
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crime
. Even the terrorist of 26/11 Mumbai attack, were getting
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latest
information through news channel.
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that it's high
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time
for
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government
to take
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stringent action and ostracize such programs

To recapitulate, I believe that, for high TRP and more profit, media has forgotten their role and
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government
should restrict such programs for peace, safety and unity of nation.
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IELTS essay GIVING DETAIL INFORMATION OF CRIMES IN NEWSPAPER AND ON TELEVISION HAS BAD CONSEQUENCES. SOME SUGGEST THAT GOVERNMENT SHOULD IMPOSE SOME RESTRICTION ON THEM. WHAT EXTENT YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE.

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  American English
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5.5
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