Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

give me the score ,ill paste the text below

give me the score, ill paste the text below Mo98L
It would not be incorrect to assume that data will rule the modern world. With the massive amount of insightful data generated by offline and online activities, it is only natural that professionals use this data to analyze, assimilate, and amalgamate the insights. Its scope is expanding all the time, thanks to the increasing capabilities of computing power and sophisticated algorithms. My first encounter with data science occurred during my spring 2018 semester at Shiv Nadar University. I went on an industrial tour of Omax Autos, where they showed me how they use computer vision to detect defects in the manufacturing process. For this, they created a convolutional neural network and trained it with photographs (type of data) of all the possible flaws. This automation is quite revolutionary, considering they used only a Captured image of the object to spot imperfections. This approach helped the company to save a significant amount of money and time. This technology piqued my interest and inspired me to pursue a career in data science. In the following summer break, I have decided to start learning about data science, and I joined a Bootcamp on Analytics and Advanced Excel organized by Ernst and young. The program was enriching in laying the fundamental concepts clear; Having had the basics sorted out, I wanted to take the learning a step further. My friend recommended me a course on machine learning by Andrew ng. This class provided me an excellent overview of machine learning. The topic of deep-learning piqued my interest the most in the class. I began my quest for deep-learning knowledge by enrolling in Coursera's deep-learning specialization. I finished all of the courses that were available over the next six months. It provided me with a lot of theoretical and practical knowledge about neural networks. While I mostly talked about the factors that led to my course selection, what excited me the most was the Project I have done in my undergrad. Under the guidance of Prof. Venkatramani, assistant professor of mechanical engineering at Shiv Nadar University, I worked on the project "detecting aeroelastic structural failures in airplane wings using mathematical modeling and machine learning techniques, " We developed a machine learning model which will classify the type of structural failure present in the structure. We have tuned the hyperparameters in such a way that the model produced an exceptionally high accuracy in predicting the kind of failure. the experience of working on this Project was gratifying; this made a significant impact on me to develop a severe inclination towards pursuing a career in Data Science. I completed my under graduation in mechanical engineering with a distinction from Shiv Nadar University. The program offered a flexible curriculum to bring out the best in me at college. While I enjoyed most of the courses on offer, I found myself more inclined to the subjects which involved having programming and mathematics in them. I specialized in computational techniques and finished my minor in Economics with an emphasis on Finance. I was awarded the prestigious "dean's list" award four times for my outstanding academic performance; this award is handed out to the top performers in each school every semester at SNU. Besides academics, I would like to talk about the extracurricular activities I participated in while in college. I was a member of the genesis team, which competed in Enduro-Student-India's national ATV building competition. I spearheaded the innovation sub-team. We are in charge of installing numerous intelligent systems in the car to assist the driver. I also played cricket for SNU and represented my campus in several inter-college matches and tournaments. Keen to ensure a balanced development of my skill set in academic and professional environments, I have decided to take an intern opportunity at Isuzu in my third-year summer break of college. I worked in the plant's logistics division as a research analyst. We worked on a project to improve the factory's efficiency by revising the movement plan and reorganizing the layout to reduce production time. For this, we carried out a time study on the movement of supplies between the storage unit and destination. We analyzed the results of the time study and offered a new plan to increase efficiency. This change resulted in a significant improvement in production time. This internship provided me with a holistic view of working in a product-based company. After graduation, I wanted to work in a real-world industrial setting to understand the software industry's nuances better. I worked as a programmer analyst for about a year and a half at cognizant Technology Solutions Pvt-Ltd. I worked on a project for our American healthcare client "Aetna" during my time at the company as an application developer for the billing system of the group insurance segment using COBOL and Db2 technologies. My role is to develop the code for the business logic required in the application for each planned update and track the deployed code for any potential defects. Working on large projects in multinational corporations has taught me a lot about teamwork and the importance of being a good team player. I have also trained in the TensorFlow framework and SQL as part of the skill-development program during my stay. The projects and training I've completed with the company have provided me with an excellent learning curve, acquainting me with various software tools and technologies. The data science program at NEU Boston is fit to my requirements for my masters. Not only do I wish to obtain a degree to boost my profile for better career opportunities, but I also look forward to an experience that provides me with the required exposure in the dynamic field of data science. I wish to avail myself of the necessary tools and equipment that encourage the best research outcomes. It offers cutting-edge technology and is well-equipped with modern infrastructure for computer science students. It provides several facilities, especially for international students. I am sure I shall gain comprehensive and exhaustive experience as I further my studies at this esteemed university. Thus, I decided to study at NEU Boston. Talking about the curriculum provided, it offers a perfect blend of theoretical and practical approaches. Of all the courses offered, I am pretty keen to study reinforcement learning and natural language processing as my electives. These subjects are in line with my specialized interests in data science. Along with the all-encompassing curriculum, I feel the inclusion of the co-op program will help me gain hands-on experience and professional skills in my chosen area. This way, I can excel and reach the heights I chase. Lastly, I want to thank you for considering my application and going through my statement.
It would not be incorrect to assume that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
data
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rule
the modern world. With the massive amount of insightful
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
data
generated by offline and online activities, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
natural that professionals
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
data
to analyze, assimilate, and amalgamate the insights. Its scope is expanding all the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
, thanks to the increasing capabilities of computing power and sophisticated algorithms. My
first
encounter with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
data
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
science
occurred during my spring 2018 semester at Shiv
Possible spelling mistake found.
Nadar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
University
. I went on an industrial tour of
Possible spelling mistake found.
Omax
Autos, where they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
me how they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
computer vision to detect defects in the manufacturing process. For this, they created a convolutional neural network and trained it with photographs (type of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
data)
of all the possible flaws. This automation is quite revolutionary, considering they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
a Captured image of the object to spot imperfections. This approach
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
to save a significant amount of money and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
This
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
piqued my interest and inspired me to pursue a career in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
data
science.

In the following summer break, I have decided to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
data
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
science
, and I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
joined
a
Possible spelling mistake found.
Bootcamp
on Analytics and Advanced Excel organized by
If the term is a proper noun, use the suggested capitalization.
Ernst and young
. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
program
was enriching in laying the fundamental concepts
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
; Having had the basics sorted out, I wanted to take the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
a step
further
. My friend recommended me a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
machine
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
by Andrew
Possible spelling mistake found.
ng
. This
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
provided
me an excellent overview of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
machine
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
. The topic of deep-learning piqued my interest the most in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
. I began my quest for deep-learning knowledge by enrolling in Coursera's deep-learning specialization. I finished
Consider using "all the".
all of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
courses
that were available over the
next
six months. It
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
provided
me with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
theoretical and practical knowledge about neural networks.

While I
mostly
talked about the factors that led to my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
selection, what excited me the most was the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Project
I have done in my undergrad. Under the guidance of Prof.
Possible spelling mistake found.
Venkatramani
, assistant professor of mechanical engineering at Shiv
Possible spelling mistake found.
Nadar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
University
, I worked on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
project
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
detecting
Possible spelling mistake found.
aeroelastic
structural failures in airplane wings using mathematical modeling and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
machine
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
techniques,
Don't put a space on both sides of a quote symbol
"
We developed a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
machine
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
model which will classify the type of structural failure present in the structure. We have tuned the
Possible spelling mistake found.
hyperparameters
in such a way that the model produced an
exceptionally
high accuracy in predicting the kind of failure.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experience
of working on this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Project
was gratifying; this made a significant impact on me to develop a severe inclination towards pursuing a career in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Data
Science.

I completed my under graduation in mechanical engineering with a distinction from Shiv
Possible spelling mistake found.
Nadar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
University
. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
program
offered a flexible curriculum to bring out the best in me at college. While I enjoyed most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
courses
on offer, I found myself more inclined to the subjects which involved having programming and mathematics in them. I specialized in computational techniques and finished my minor in Economics with an emphasis on Finance. I
was awarded
the prestigious
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
dean's list
Use a smart closing quote here: "”".
"
award four
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
times
for my outstanding academic performance; this award
is handed
out to the top performers in each school every semester at SNU.
Besides
academics, I would like to talk about the extracurricular activities I participated in while in college. I was a member of the genesis team, which competed in Enduro-Student-India's national ATV building competition. I spearheaded the innovation sub-team. We are in charge of installing numerous intelligent systems in the car to assist the driver. I
also
played cricket for SNU and represented my campus in several inter-college matches and tournaments.

Keen to ensure a balanced development of my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
set in academic and professional environments, I have decided to take an intern opportunity at Isuzu in my third-year summer break of college. I worked in the plant's logistics division as a research analyst. We worked on a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
project
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the factory's efficiency by revising the movement plan and reorganizing the layout to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
production
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
. For this, we carried out a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
on the movement of supplies between the storage unit and destination. We analyzed the results of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
and offered a new plan to increase efficiency. This
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
resulted in a significant improvement in production
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
. This internship
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
provided
me with a holistic view of working in a product-based
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

After graduation, I wanted to work in a real-world industrial setting to understand the software industry's nuances better. I worked as a programmer analyst for about a year and a half at cognizant
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Technology
Solutions Pvt-Ltd. I worked on a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
project
for our American healthcare client
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
Aetna
Use a smart closing quote here: "”".
"
during my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
as an application developer for the billing system of the group insurance segment using COBOL and Db2
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technologies
. My role is to develop the code for the business logic required in the application for each planned update and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
track
the deployed code for any potential defects. Working on large
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
projects
in multinational corporations has taught me a lot about teamwork and the importance of being a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
team player. I have
also
trained in the TensorFlow framework and SQL as part of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
-development
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
program
during my stay. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
projects
and training I've completed with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
have
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
provided
me with an excellent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
curve, acquainting me with various software tools and technologies.

The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
data
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
science
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
program
at
Possible spelling mistake found.
NEU
Boston
is fit
to my requirements for my masters. Not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
do I wish to obtain a degree to boost my profile for better career opportunities,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I
also
look forward to an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experience
that provides me with the required exposure in the dynamic field of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
data
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
science
. I wish to avail myself of the necessary tools and equipment that encourage the best research outcomes. It offers cutting-edge
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
and is well-equipped with modern infrastructure for computer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
science
students. It provides several facilities,
especially
for international students. I am sure I shall gain comprehensive and exhaustive
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experience
as I
further
my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studies
at this esteemed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
.
Thus
, I decided to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
at
Possible spelling mistake found.
NEU
Boston.

Talking about the curriculum
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
provided
, it offers a perfect blend of theoretical and practical approaches. Of all the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
courses
offered, I am pretty keen to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
reinforcement
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
and natural language processing as my electives. These subjects are in line with my specialized interests in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
data
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
science
. Along with the all-encompassing curriculum, I feel the inclusion of the co-op
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
program
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me gain hands-on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experience
and professional
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
in my chosen area. This way, I can excel and reach the heights I chase.

Lastly
, I want to thank you for considering my application and going through my statement.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay give me the score, ill paste the text below

Essay
  American English
9 paragraphs
1112 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts