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Friends and family bring more happiness than money and possessions. How far do you agree with this statement.Give reasons and include any relevany example. Write at least 250 words

Friends and family bring more happiness than money and possessions. How far Give reasons and include any relevany example. Xqj3E
Everyone strives for perfection and happiness in their lives; some people prefer social prestige and money over the family home, however, friends and family provide harmonious life to me under all conditions, to the highest level of satisfaction. The first reason I value the concept of family over worldly possessions because family is the place where every individual can return no matter what. Strangers perceive us as little more than a bystander, whereas our family sees me as everything. Money comes first in the minds of young people like myself, as I've discovered via the thoughts of my friends and those people around me. Of course, depending on their age, everyone enjoys making money and using it for personal or greater reasons. Sometimes, copious of people forget their beloved roots and origins as a result of this. Everyone needs at least one buddy who will always stand by our side and support us when we need it; even if that isn't the case, family will always be there to motivate us. Living in a technologically advanced culture where we are so focused on gaining money and being a slave to money that we forget our dearest friend and family. My own experiences have demonstrated that for many young people and teenagers at this time, earning money is more vital than studying in order to repay their parents' support. Money is one of the things overshadowed the iron will of man when we first enter the society full of temptations. More precisely, some of my acquaintances, who have given up their education to make money only to prove themselves competent at trading in products, established the competition for gain and loss in daily life, ignore the future that their parents set for them. Apart from honoring one's family, which is a necessary for every human being, in my opinion, is vital because it complements each other also impossible to say which is better. In short, the genuine family is always a tranquil berth, always covering and safeguarding each of us, no matter how violent, stormy, and dishonest society is. Our parents are constantly there, arms extending, waiting along with protecting us like a child. Nevertheless, as each person grows older, separates from their parents' arms, and assumes a variety of obligations, the balance between family and money remains the most important factor.
Everyone strives for perfection and happiness in their
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lives
;
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some
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people
prefer social prestige and
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money
over the
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family
home,
however
, friends and
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family
provide harmonious life to me under all conditions, to the highest level of satisfaction.

The
first
reason I value the concept of
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family
over worldly possessions
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because
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family
is the place where every individual can return no matter what. Strangers perceive us as
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little
more than a bystander, whereas our
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family
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sees
me as everything.
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Money
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comes
first
in the minds of young
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people
like myself, as I've discovered via the thoughts of my friends and those
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people
around me.
Of course
, depending on their age, everyone enjoys making
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money
and using it for personal or greater reasons.
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Sometimes
, copious of
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people
forget their beloved roots and origins
as a result
of this. Everyone needs at least one buddy who will always stand by our side and support us when we need it; even if that isn't the case,
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family
will always be there to motivate us. Living in a
technologically
advanced culture where we are
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so
focused on gaining
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money
and being a slave to
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money
that we forget our dearest friend and
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family
. My
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own
experiences have demonstrated that for
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many
young
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people
and
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teenagers
at this time, earning
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money
is more vital than studying in order to repay their parents' support.
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Money
is one of the things overshadowed the iron will of
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man
when we
first
enter the society full of temptations. More
precisely
,
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some
of my acquaintances, who have
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given
up their education to
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make
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money
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only
to prove themselves competent at trading in products, established the competition for gain and loss in daily life,
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ignore
the future that their parents set for them. Apart from honoring one's
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family
, which is a necessary for every human being, in my opinion, is vital
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because
it complements each other
also
impossible to say which is better.

In short, the genuine
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
is always a tranquil berth, always covering and safeguarding each of us, no matter how violent, stormy, and dishonest society is. Our parents are
constantly
there, arms extending, waiting along with protecting us like a child.
Nevertheless
, as each person grows older, separates from their parents' arms, and assumes a variety of obligations, the balance between
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
and
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money
remains the most
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important
factor.
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IELTS essay Friends and family bring more happiness than money and possessions. How far Give reasons and include any relevany example.

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