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friend has decided to switch careers but isn’t sure which to choose. What advice would you give them? Provide reasons and examples to support your response. v.2

friend has decided to switch careers but isn’t sure which to choose. What advice would you give them? Provide reasons and examples to support your response. v. 2
There is no shortage of opinion on whether it is better to switch the career which means takes a lot of risk from life. If I suggested to my friend about changing career to a new one, I would definitely urge her lot to make progress in her life. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following reasons. First of all, Switching her career is very helpful to live with delight in her life because in today world a lot of people prefer to change their jobs to acquiring invaluable experiences and seeking for their favourite things for doing many different works in all over the world. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my experience. When I work at first time on the business project as conductor after the graduation of my university, I was easily bored with my job within a half-year so I determined to pursue in my dream job which is really low-paid environmental researcher in my local town. Despite those hardships, I wanted to apply the small research company as an assistant. After almost six months of hard-working, I promoted a legal employee in my company so now I am really happy with my decision because it gives me unfathomable pleasure even it has plenty of workloads. This example demonstrates how making a resolution to change my career which is my least favourite one is changed my life altogether. Secondly, Trying a lot of things in your life as much as she can create an opportunity to make progress on my friend’s life also sticking one place in her entire life is utterly ridiculous because it means she can’t improve her abilities in different situations and even can’t disclosure her hidden talents. Drawing from my brother’s experience, He didn’t satisfied with his job because it is very low-paid even if he worked in stretched hours. One day, He applied in a foreign-invested company as an engineer then he was accepted readily to work in this company due to his great talents. He said that it was an entirely open-minded event from him because working with intelligent and hospitable people is grateful and it enables him to learn from his coworkers day by day. Without decisive determination to shift his career, he couldn’t be fulfilled with his life like now. I strongly recommend to my friend that changing her career is the best decision to make as ever she has made. This is because it allows her to be happy with her life more fully and because it helps her to make improvement which leads her to a bright future.
There is no shortage of opinion on whether it is better to switch the
career
which means takes a
lot
of
risk
from
life
. If I suggested to my friend about changing
career
to a new one, I would definitely urge her
lot
to
make
progress in her
life
. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following reasons.

First of all
, Switching her
career
is
very
helpful to
live
with delight in her
life
because
in
today
world a
lot
of
people
prefer to
change
their
jobs
to acquiring invaluable experiences and seeking for their
favourite
things for doing
many
different
works in all over the world. I
have to
admit that my opinion on this matter has been
profoundly
influenced by my experience. When I work at
first
time on the business project as conductor after the graduation of my university, I was
easily
bored with my
job
within a half-year
so
I determined to pursue in my dream
job
which is
really
low-paid environmental researcher in my local town. Despite those hardships, I wanted to apply the
small
research
company
as an assistant. After almost six months of
hard
-working, I promoted a legal employee in my
company
so
now
I am
really
happy with my decision
because
it gives me unfathomable pleasure even it has
plenty
of workloads. This example demonstrates how making a resolution to
change
my
career
which is my least
favourite
one is
changed
my
life
altogether.

Secondly
, Trying a
lot
of things in your
life
as much as she can create an opportunity to
make
progress on my friend’s
life
also
sticking one place in her entire
life
is
utterly
ridiculous
because
it means she can’t
improve
her abilities in
different
situations and even can’t disclosure her hidden talents. Drawing from my brother’s experience, He didn’t
satisfied
with his
job
because
it is
very
low-paid even if he worked in stretched hours. One day, He applied in a foreign-invested
company
as an engineer then he was
accepted
readily
to work in this
company
due to his great talents. He said that it was an
entirely
open-minded
event
from him
because
working with intelligent and hospitable
people
is
grateful and it enables him to learn from his coworkers day by day. Without decisive determination to shift his
career
, he couldn’t
be fulfilled
with his
life
like
now
.

I
strongly
recommend to my friend that changing her
career
is the best decision to
make
as ever she has made. This is
because
it
allows
her to be happy with her
life
more
fully
and
because
it
helps
her to
make
improvement which leads her to a bright future.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay friend has decided to switch careers but isn’t sure which to choose. What advice would you give them? Provide reasons and examples to support your response. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
448 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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