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For many shopping malls are great places to spend their leisure time and meet others People however in the past mostly visited those when necessary To what extent do you think this is a negative trend v.4

For many shopping malls are great places to spend their leisure time and meet others People however in the past mostly visited those when necessary 4
These days, recreational activities of people have changed. With widespread expanison of malls near our doorsteps have influenced people to visit these places on a frequent go. While mushrooming up of these malls has created an increment in debt owing people in a country. I frimly, believe that these shopping malls which have now been used as spot for leisure time activity is totally a disadvantage to our society. To begin with, shopping malls these days are been used for spending idle time and has become the meeting spot. As earleir people used to visit such places only when they are in serious need for the items or clothes they are running out of. But unfortunately, people have alot more amenites been provided to them at such place. For instance, students after there exams likely to meet at mall spending time together watching movies and then hanging out with friends at foodcourt. Furthermore, people do have tendancy to not just shop but also shop without a reason which leads them to the threat of induldging them into debt trap. As a result, people get in habit of faltering off by showing the capacity they can shop being a shopaholic. Wherein, teenagers ending up in the habit of leading a life which is unreasltic at the end. For instance, families nowadays also have made these malls as destinations to meet in holidays. Therefore, leading youth to the habits which are of no use as they become more lathergic. In this age where physical activities are important of person to develop overall thus leading childern in a bad habit of wasting money. To sum up, shopping malls do play a role to provide an enviornemnt which provides people with rejuvinating activity. But, i firmly believe that opening up of these malls has involvoed people in more debts and lead to decline in economy' s grwoth.
These days, recreational
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activities
of
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people
have
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changed
. With widespread
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expanison
of
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malls
near our doorsteps have influenced
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people
to visit these places on a frequent go.
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While
mushrooming up of these
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malls
has created an increment in debt owing
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people
in a country. I
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frimly
, believe that these shopping
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malls
which have
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now
been
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used
as spot for leisure time
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activity
is
totally
a disadvantage to our society.

To
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begin
with, shopping
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malls
these days
are been
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used
for spending idle time and has become the meeting spot. As
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earleir
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people
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used
to visit such places
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only
when they are in serious need for the items or clothes they are running out of.
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But
unfortunately,
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people
have
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alot
more
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amenites
been provided
to them at such place.
For instance
, students after there exams likely to
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meet
at
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mall
spending time together watching movies and then hanging out with friends at
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foodcourt
.

Furthermore
,
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people
do have
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tendancy
to not
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just
shop
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but
also
shop without a reason which leads them to the threat of
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induldging
them into debt trap.
As a result
,
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people
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get
in
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habit
of faltering off by showing the capacity they can shop being a shopaholic. Wherein,
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teenagers
ending up in the
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habit
of leading a life which is
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unreasltic
at the
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end
.
For instance
, families nowadays
also
have made these
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malls
as destinations to
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meet
in holidays.
Therefore
, leading youth to the
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habits
which are of no
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use
as they become more
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lathergic
. In this age where physical
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activities
are
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important
of person to develop
overall
thus
leading
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childern
in a
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bad
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habit
of wasting money.

To sum up, shopping
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malls
do play a role to provide an
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enviornemnt
which provides
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people
with
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rejuvinating
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activity
.
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But
,
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i
firmly
believe that opening up of these
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malls
has
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involvoed
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people
in more debts and lead to decline in
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economy&
#039; s
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grwoth
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Mistakes

IELTS essay For many shopping malls are great places to spend their leisure time and meet others People however in the past mostly visited those when necessary 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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