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For some people, the ideal holiday is to get away from their normal routineby staying in a hotel or camping in a countryside. Others prefer to stay at home and do things they do not normally have time for. What do you think are the benefits of going away v.2

For some people, the ideal holiday is to get away from their normal routineby staying in a hotel or camping in a countryside. Others prefer to stay at home and do things they do not normally have time for. What do you think are the benefits of going away v. 2
Nowadays, many people believe that it is an essential thing to have an opportunity to go out from their daily routine life on special resorts and vacations. Whereas, other people prefer to stay at their homes or doing some delayed work during their slack time. Entertainment during leisure time has multiple advantages on person' s life and character. This essay will first discuss how getting away off the beaten track of the routine life impacting individual' s character and surrounding people as well as it will show the significant merits that could be gained at working level and how it could improve the career life. Holiday entitlement is highly important for person' s life and his relatives. Spending weekends in a special places which is distinct from your hometown can improve the feelings and emotions and can release the feeling of being stressed out from the heavy workloads. For instance, travelling to different places that have stunning landscape and sightseeing views will facilitate chilling out at these areas which can enhance your feelings and reinforce the inspiration from being relaxed and comfortable. On the other hand, this regularly change is also vital for better working and management. Despite, holidays can decrease the working time, it can leverage on the production level of work and achieving good results. For example, according to study have been conducted at France, the results concluded that workers and employees who are keen on spending their free time for enjoyment and entertainment showed higher mental abilities and increasing levels of their production at work compared to people that ignore these times. Thus, having the chance to make time for refreshment is viable for job upgrading. As such can be concluded, Although there are a lot of people who searching how can they have a blast in their weekend, there are other category who refuses to change their mind on doing tedious and repeating work every weekend. In my opinion, I convinced that get going for any vacation is worth one' s while to load off mind of job problems to improve person' s abilities and feelings.
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on special resorts and vacations. Whereas, other
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people
prefer to stay at their homes or doing
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during their slack
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. Entertainment during leisure
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time
has multiple advantages on
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life
and character. This essay will
first
discuss how getting away off the beaten
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impacting
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people
as well
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at working level and how it could
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improve
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for
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and his relatives. Spending weekends in a special places which is distinct from your hometown can
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improve
the
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feelings
and emotions and can release the
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feeling
of being
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stressed
out from the heavy workloads.
For instance
, travelling to
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different
places that have stunning landscape and sightseeing views will facilitate chilling out at these areas which can enhance your
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feelings
and reinforce the inspiration from
being relaxed
and comfortable.

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change
is
also
vital for better working and management. Despite, holidays can decrease the working
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time
, it can leverage on the production level of
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work
and achieving
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good
results.
For example
, according to study have
been conducted
at France, the results concluded that workers and employees who are keen on spending their free
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time
for enjoyment and entertainment
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showed
higher mental abilities and increasing levels of their production at
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work
compared to
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that
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.
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time
for refreshment is viable for job upgrading.

As such can
be concluded
, Although there are
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a lot of
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people
who searching how can they have a blast in their weekend, there are other
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who refuses to
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change
their mind on doing tedious and repeating
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work
every weekend. In my opinion, I convinced that
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get
going for any vacation is worth
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one&
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improve
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person&
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feelings
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IELTS essay For some people, the ideal holiday is to get away from their normal routineby staying in a hotel or camping in a countryside. Others prefer to stay at home and do things they do not normally have time for. What do you think are the benefits of going away v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
350 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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