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For some people, success is measured by the amount of salary one earns from his work. Do you agree with this point of view? Provide relevant examples if necessary

For some people, success is measured by the amount of salary one earns from his work. Do you agree with this point of view? Provide relevant examples if necessary aqLkm
Earning from the business is the way to calculate fame. I would argue with this trend, people cannot judge the famous with its incoming because people enjoy working professionally and also become celebrated. Another reason is people want to fulfill their goals and become famous. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with this essay. Firstly, people doing what they want to do happily and also get wages more and more. That’s leads to become achievement. People want to work the field that have same professional and aims that make more enjoyable besides they are earned much wages with well known. A good illustration of this is, Sayar Sai, a famous visualizer in Myanmar, he loves to work designing urban building. Also, his design looks professional and leads to popular. This is the fact, achievement is estimated by his working professional and his best hard work. Secondly, people want to achieve their destination and lead to popular. Some walk to their self- achievement not only as work but also as hobby. They try hard and also start to noted by people. For instance, Cristiano Ronaldo, a football player, he does not try to find business which he can do advertising and earn money. His real well known is accomplish in competition. Taking everything into consideration, accomplishment is calculated by hardworking and self-achievement.
Earning from the business is the way to calculate fame. I would argue with this trend,
people
cannot judge the
famous
with its incoming
because
people
enjoy working
professionally
and
also
become celebrated. Another reason is
people
want
to fulfill their goals and become
famous
. In my opinion, I
strongly
disagree with this essay.

Firstly
,
people
doing what they
want
to do
happily
and
also
get
wages more and more. That’s leads to become achievement.
People
want
to work the field that have same professional and aims that
make
more enjoyable
besides
they
are earned
much
wages with well known. A
good
illustration of this is,
Sayar
Sai
, a
famous
visualizer in Myanmar, he
loves
to work designing urban building.
Also
, his design looks professional and leads to popular. This is the fact, achievement
is estimated
by his working professional and his best
hard
work.

Secondly
,
people
want
to achieve their destination and lead to popular.
Some
walk to their self- achievement not
only
as work
but
also
as hobby. They try
hard
and
also
start
to noted by
people
.
For instance
, Cristiano Ronaldo, a football player, he does not try to find business which he can
do advertising
and earn money. His real well known is
accomplish
in competition.

Taking everything into consideration, accomplishment
is calculated
by hardworking and self-achievement.
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IELTS essay For some people, success is measured by the amount of salary one earns from his work. Do you agree with this point of view? Provide relevant examples if necessary

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