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Every culture, throughout time, has recorded it history in one way or another. In what ways can history be passed on to the next generation? v.2

Every culture, throughout time, has recorded it history in one way or another. In what ways can history be passed on to the next generation? v. 2
One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that history was recorded by all cultures from early times, and it was done in different was. History should be saved in our computers and in the internet for centuries, as people should know about the past times as it can help to predict the future and save humankind. Firstly, it must be admitted that history is the most important source of knowledge and history should be saved on the hard drivers and in the internet. This is because the internet and hard drivers are the most reliable ways to save information for centuries. One of the main reasons behind that is that simple computer with 100 GB memory can save million books, photographs and articles. Furthermore, all information about history can be copied million times in to different computers, servers and hard drivers and saved around the world as this devices are very small and can be saved in one locked room. People from early times were interested in the history as it helped them to understand many issues and answer to the most interest questions. In other words, it would be impossible to understand how people lived thousands ears ago without books which archeologists found in the ancient places. Another point to consider is that history helps us to predict the future and prevent many dire consequences from nature catastrophes. Take for example South-east Asia countries, they created the most efficient alarm system from typhoons and hurricanes after the most terrible typhoon in 2009 which took away more than 300 000 lives. In conclusion, people should save information about history in our state-of-the-art technologies for future generation as it will help them to develop and prevent catastrophes.
One of the
widely
discussed issues nowadays is that
history
was recorded
by all cultures from early
times
, and it
was done
in
different
was.
History
should be
saved
in our computers and
in the internet
for centuries, as
people
should know about the past
times
as it can
help
to predict the future and
save
humankind.

Firstly
, it
must
be admitted
that
history
is the most
important
source of knowledge and
history
should be
saved
on the
hard
drivers and
in the internet
. This is
because
the internet and
hard
drivers are the most reliable ways to
save
information for centuries. One of the main reasons behind
that is
that simple computer with 100 GB memory can
save
million
books, photographs and articles.
Furthermore
, all information about
history
can
be copied
million
times
in to
different
computers, servers and
hard
drivers and
saved
around the world as
this
devices are
very
small
and can be
saved
in one locked room.

People
from early
times
were interested
in the
history
as it
helped
them to understand
many
issues and answer to the most interest questions.
In other words
, it would be impossible to understand how
people
lived
thousands ears ago without books which archeologists found in the ancient places. Another point to consider is that
history
helps
us to predict the future and
prevent
many
dire
consequences from
nature catastrophes. Take
for example
South-east Asia countries, they created the most efficient alarm system from typhoons and hurricanes after the most terrible typhoon in 2009 which took away more than 300 000
lives
.

In conclusion
,
people
should
save
information about
history
in our state-of-the-art technologies for future generation as it will
help
them to develop and
prevent
catastrophes.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Every culture, throughout time, has recorded it history in one way or another. In what ways can history be passed on to the next generation? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
6.5
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