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Demonstrated in the line graph is statistics visitors who visited four museums around the world from 1980 to 2015. From an observational perspective, it can be seen that the number of visitors of Egyptian Museum and Tokyo National Museum are the highest during the timeframe whereas Hermitage and National Museum of Anthropology got the lowest. It should also be noted that Egyptian Museum and Tokyo National Museum rose together to the top in the end of the timeline and the visitors of National Museum of Anthropology dropped to the lowest point in the graph. Looking at the figures for Egyptian Museum in further detail, the number of people went there was started at around 8, 000. In 1995, the visitors who came to visit it was increased to around 9, 000 people. However, in 2002, the amount of visitor visited there was dropped to over 8, 000. After the decrease, Egyptian Museum attracted more and more visitors during the periods. As a result, it got approximately 10, 000 visitors and be the highest pointed in the end of the timeframe (2015). Moving onto the number of visitors of Tokyo National Museum, Hermitage and National Museum of Anthropology. At the beginning (in 1980), the numbers of visitors started at roughly 4, 000 visitors. In 1985, the visitors of Tokyo National Museum increased to slightly more than 5, 000 and kept increasing to roughly 9, 000 in the end of the periods (2015). Besides that National Museum of Anthropology‘s visitor remained steady for five years. Between 1995 and 2015, it was continuing dropped to just a little more than 2, 000 visitors while the number of visitors of Hermitage slightly decreased to around 3, 000 visitors. However, from the period of the year 2000 to 2015, the number of visitors rose from over 3, 000 to approximately 4, 000.
Demonstrated in the line graph is statistics
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around
the world from 1980 to 2015.

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seen
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visitors
of Egyptian
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Museum
and Tokyo
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National
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Museum
are the highest during the timeframe whereas Hermitage and
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National
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Museum
of
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Anthropology
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got
the lowest. It should
also
be noted
that Egyptian
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Museum
and Tokyo
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National
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Museum
rose together to the top in the
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end
of the timeline and the
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visitors
of
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National
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Museum
of
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Anthropology
dropped to the lowest point in the graph.

Looking at the figures for Egyptian
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Museum
in
further
detail, the
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number
of
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people
went there was
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started
at
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around
8, 000. In 1995, the
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visitors
who came to visit it
was increased
to
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around
9, 000
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people
.
However
, in 2002, the amount of
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visitor
visited there
was dropped
to over 8, 000. After the decrease, Egyptian
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Museum
attracted more and more
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visitors
during the periods.
As a result
, it
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got
approximately 10, 000
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visitors
and be the highest pointed in the
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end
of the timeframe (2015).

Moving onto the
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number
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visitors
of Tokyo
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National
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Museum
, Hermitage and
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National
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Museum
of
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Anthropology
. At the beginning (in 1980), the
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numbers
of
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visitors
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started
at roughly 4, 000
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visitors
. In 1985, the
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visitors
of Tokyo
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National
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Museum
increased to
slightly
more than 5, 000 and
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kept
increasing to roughly 9, 000 in the
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end
of the periods (2015).
Besides
that
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National
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Museum
of
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Anthropology‘s
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visitor
remained steady for five years. Between 1995 and 2015, it was continuing dropped to
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a
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more than 2, 000
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visitors
while the
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number
of
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visitors
of Hermitage
slightly
decreased to
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around
3, 000
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visitors
.
However
, from the period of the year 2000 to 2015, the
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number
of
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visitors
rose from over 3, 000 to approximately 4, 000.
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IELTS essay "For good ideas and true inn Demonstrated in the line graph is statistics visitors who visited four museums around the world from 1980 to 2015. ovation, you need human interaction, conflict, argument, debate. . . "

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