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The use of mobile phones should be banned in public places like libraries and shops

The use of mobile phones should be banned in public places like libraries and shops K0lyL
In these days and ages, phones have been woven into the fabric of our daily life. They seem to be carried everywhere and used tumultuously. However, in my opinion, in such public places such as libraries or hospitals, the use of mobile phones is fundamentally forbidden, but in other places, those devices can still be accessible as long as they are judiciously utilized and in a respectful manner. There are a variety of reasons why phone devices should be restricted in such places. This is true, as anyone with any sense would acknowledge how annoying a cellular telephone sound can be, especially in a placid place like a library, where great concentration is indispensable. Just a simple sound from phone notifications can inhibit both users and other people from being able to properly focus. In addition, in hospitals, phones are strictly banned as their signals can cause a lot of problems by interfering with complicated instruments or equipment. Besides, they can also irritate other patients by talking way too loudly or constantly idling gossip all day. However, it would also be seismically wrong if phones were restricted in public places. As a matter of fact, we can not leave them on the periphery of those places. In some cases, such as a person having a stroke or a crime being committed, emergency calls need to be made. Moreover, there are also some businessmen who need them to make frequent phone calls. Gradually, they have become an embedded part of those people. As a result, it is believed that banning them in such places is unnecessary and unhelpful as well. To simply avoid intrusions, smartphone owners only have to turn down the volume or turn on the airplane mode of their devices, which can prevent disruption from social media and callers. In conclusion, although mobile phones should be banned in certain areas, such as libraries or hospitals, in other places, they can still be used in both pragmatic and judicious ways.
In these days and ages,
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phones
have
been woven
into the fabric of our daily life. They seem to
be carried
everywhere and
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used
tumultuously
.
However
, in my opinion, in such public
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places
such as libraries or hospitals, the
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use
of mobile
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phones
is
fundamentally
forbidden,
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but
in
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other
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places
, those devices can
still
be accessible as long as they are
judiciously
utilized and
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in a respectful manner
.

There are a variety of reasons why
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phone
devices should
be restricted
in such
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places
. This is true, as anyone with any sense would acknowledge how annoying a cellular telephone sound can be,
especially
in a placid
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place
like a library, where great concentration is indispensable.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Just
a simple sound from
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phone
notifications can inhibit both users and
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other
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people
from being able to
properly
focus.
In addition
, in hospitals,
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phones
are
strictly
banned as their signals can cause
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a lot of
problems by interfering with complicated instruments or equipment.
Besides
, they can
also
irritate
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other
patients by talking way too
loudly
or
constantly
idling gossip all day.

However
, it would
also
be
seismically
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wrong
if
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phones
were restricted
in public
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places
. As a matter of fact, we can not
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leave
them on the periphery of those
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places
. In
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some
cases, such as a person having a stroke or a crime
being committed
, emergency calls need to
be made
.
Moreover
, there are
also
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some
businessmen who need them to
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make
frequent
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phone
calls.
Gradually
, they have become an embedded part of those
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.
As a result
, it
is believed
that banning them in such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
is unnecessary and unhelpful
as well
. To
simply
avoid intrusions, smartphone owners
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only
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have to
turn down the volume or turn on the airplane mode of their devices, which can
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prevent
disruption from social media and callers.

In conclusion
, although mobile
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phones
should
be banned
in certain areas, such as libraries or hospitals, in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
, they can
still
be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
in both pragmatic and judicious ways.
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IELTS essay The use of mobile phones should be banned in public places like libraries and shops

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
6.0
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