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For decades, space has inspired the human imagination. There are many who feel that space travel is a waste of time and resources, yet others believe that it brings many benefits to society. Discuss both of these views and give your opinion? v.1

For decades, space has inspired the human imagination. There are many who feel that space travel is a waste of time and resources, yet others believe that it brings many benefits to society. v. 1
The environment plays an imperative role in the survival of living organisms. This situation has become a major concern over the last couple of decades, resulting in several debates on who should be responsible for ensuring its sustenance for our future generations. The question often asked is whether the government or an individual who has to protect it. I profoundly believe that individuals should take the initiative to save the environment. To start with, people should be responsible for the proper disposal of the waste they produce in their daily life. For instance, when people throw garbage in their surroundings, it leads to pollution, which creates disturbances for other organisms which depend on land resources for food. Animals such as cows, and goats, among others rely on the food which is available on land. If the garbage includes plastics, it may damage their digestive system and this, in turn, would create ecological imbalances. Hence, people should be cautious about what kind of waste materials are thrown into the dumping yards. Additionally, the water bodies have to be protected by an individual. It is because, industries, which are run by people dump the wastes into rivers and nearby lakes which ultimately cause health issues to the people who consume it. For instance, the higher authorities of such industries should impose high taxes or set up laws that ban the toxic emissions from factories directly into watercourses. This could cause less air and water pollution, which could guarantee the good health of citizens. Therefore, it is the prime duty of an individual to protect the environment. To conclude, environmental problems could have severe reactions if neglected. Hence this issue has to be addressed seriously and forthwith. I firmly believe that an individual is the one who can bring about a change in the environment. A little, but consistent effort on the part of the individual can bring about a huge difference.
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who
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profoundly
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individuals
should take the initiative to save the environment.

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start
with,
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people
should be responsible for the proper disposal of the waste they produce in their daily life.
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, when
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people
throw garbage in their surroundings, it leads to pollution, which creates disturbances for other organisms which depend on land resources for food. Animals such as cows, and goats, among others rely on the food which is available on land. If the garbage includes plastics, it may damage their digestive system and this, in turn, would create ecological imbalances.
Hence
,
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people
should be cautious about what kind of waste materials
are thrown
into the dumping yards.

Additionally
, the water bodies
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have to
be protected
by an
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individual
. It is
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because
, industries, which
are run
by
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people
dump the wastes into rivers and nearby lakes which
ultimately
cause health issues to the
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people
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who
consume it.
For instance
, the higher authorities of such industries should impose high taxes or set up laws that ban the toxic emissions from factories
directly
into watercourses. This could cause less air and water pollution, which could guarantee the
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good
health of citizens.
Therefore
, it is the prime duty of an
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individual
to protect the environment.

To conclude
, environmental problems could have severe reactions if neglected.
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Hence
this issue
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has to
be addressed
seriously
and forthwith. I
firmly
believe that an
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individual
is the one
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who
can bring about a
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change
in the environment. A
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little
,
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but
consistent effort on the part of the
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individual
can bring about a huge difference.
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IELTS essay For decades, space has inspired the human imagination. There are many who feel that space travel is a waste of time and resources, yet others believe that it brings many benefits to society. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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