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first part time job experience

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During student time, to able to make money and cover my life that I had to do a lot of part time jobs. There were many people said that ‘’ first impress is always a most important thing ‘’. that’s true. My first part time job was waiter which gave me so many amazing things that I couldn’t believe. About I was received first income, I could buy something I really love by my first income, many experiences I hadn’t been have before. . . , The first few days were really difficult for me, however, because I wanted a better life, I have been attached to it for a long time…. That was just a normal job, but I had a lot of good moments with my co-workers, somehow it helped me learn more about patient and humility. It also helped me to build the background for currently job.

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