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The parents take responsibility .

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In 21st century, most of child have becomes over independent owing to the fact western culture, over uses of technology so parents should take which measurement against thier children activities and also how punished them. There are several reasons and solutions of this view that will be discussed. To begin, under 12 year's old children mindset is totally different to compare with adults thinks in light of the fact their mind ability and interest are change on day by day. This reason is more complicated hence parents should observe their baby's all activities. Children can choose crime way if parents don't observe them. Whenever any mistakes do by child when surrogate mother should give little punishment hence they will not do mistake in future. Punishment such as not give favourite food, stop with their close friends, not talk with them etc. For instance, surway of “THE TIMES OF INDIA” is that 63 percent children have been becoming criminal owing to the fact their parents did not punished of their little crime. Furthermore, a plethora of youngster are external using of smart phones, technology and other instrument due to this reasons child's mind become more agressive and create thaughts of crime. Solution of it, parents should give lesson to their child about uses of technology and games are more harmful for your creativity. Moreover, mother and father should give knowledge of our society besides also our customes. For example, report of “THE WORLD TECHNOLOGY MAGAZINE” explains that in this century 97% children do play violence games such as pubg, free fire etc. To sum up, parents should give remark of thier seed work if offspring don't guiltiness activities. I think that parents should take all responsibility when they are under teenager because of this child are staying in under control.
In 21st century, most of
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parents
should take which measurement against
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children
activities and
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be discussed
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children
mindset is
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different
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in light of the fact their mind ability and interest are
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change
on day by day. This reason is more complicated
hence
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parents
should observe their baby's all activities.
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Children
can choose crime way if
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parents
don't observe them. Whenever any mistakes do by
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child
when surrogate mother should
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give
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punishment
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they will not do mistake
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of “THE TIMES OF INDIA” is that 63 percent
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have been becoming criminal owing to the fact their
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did not
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punished
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and other instrument due to this
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child's mind become more
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agressive
and create
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thaughts
of crime. Solution of it,
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should
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lesson to their
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about
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give
knowledge of our society
besides
also
our
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customes
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, report of “THE WORLD
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TECHNOLOGY
MAGAZINE”
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explains
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children
do play violence games such as
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pubg
, free fire etc.

To sum up,
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should
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give
remark of
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seed work if offspring don't guiltiness activities. I
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think
that
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parents
should take all responsibility when they are under
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teenager
because of this
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child
are staying in under control.
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IELTS essay The parents take responsibility .

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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