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Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up.

Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up. 0Qln
It is sometimes argued that father should be important like mother. Mother are only responsible for making decisions that offsprings can take their own responsibility for bringing they up. In conformity with this view, I presume that father and mother equally crucial for their children and women are not only responsible for making any decisions about their off-springs. First and foremost, there are ample of reasons that fatherhood ought to be emphasized as like as motherhood, however, we live in an contemporary era, as a result, parents are too much busy compare with last few decades. It, needless to say, has to be taken into account that children can learn plenty of things from their father as well as mother, helping their career as well. to set an example it has been published by a reputed newspaper that children 80% of new vert or no from their parents and numerous ginetic similarity mesho within ago 10. For this reason i strongly believe fatherhood and motherhood equally significant. Despite the aforesaid argument, women are only taken decisions about their child, and off-springs may lead, their responsibility to grow their father life. Although women have power and ability to take any important or severe decision sole, men also have things. In other word, child might face lack of love from his father, which creates severe problem in their family life, on the other hand, offsprings can make decision about their career or hobby, but they have to discuss with their parents about the particular issue, which they want to do. Finally, at the light of above information, i assume that fatherhood and motherhood have some importances at the same time the children can lead their life with aiding their parents that not only women responsibility but also men.
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father
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important
like
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mother
.
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are
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only
responsible for making
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decisions
that
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offsprings can
take their
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own
responsibility for bringing they up. In conformity with this view, I presume that
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father
and
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mother
equally
crucial for their
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children
and
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women
are not
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only
responsible for making any
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decisions
about their off-springs.

First
and foremost, there are ample of reasons that fatherhood ought to
be emphasized
as like as motherhood,
however
, we
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live
in
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an
contemporary era,
as a result
,
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parents
are too much busy compare with last few decades. It, needless to say,
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has to
be taken
into account that
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children
can learn
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plenty
of things from their
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father
as well
as
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mother
, helping their career
as well
.
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to
set an example it has
been published
by a reputed newspaper that
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children
80% of new vert or
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no
from their
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parents
and numerous
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ginetic
similarity
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mesho
within ago 10.
For this reason
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i
strongly
believe fatherhood and motherhood
equally
significant.

Despite the aforesaid argument,
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women
are
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only
taken
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decisions
about their child, and off-springs may lead, their responsibility to grow their
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father
life. Although
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women
have power and ability to take any
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important
or severe
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decision
sole,
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men
also
have things. In other word, child might face lack of
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love
from his
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father
, which creates severe problem in their family life,
on the other hand
,
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offsprings can
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make
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decision
about their career or hobby,
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but
they
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have to
discuss with their
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parents
about the particular issue, which they want to do.

Finally
, at the light of above information,
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i
assume that fatherhood and motherhood have
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some
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importances at
the same time the
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children
can lead their life with aiding their
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parents
that not
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only
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women
responsibility
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but
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
men
.

IELTS essay Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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