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In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment.

In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. po1D
In a wide range of countries there are several highly qualified graduates that are currently unemployed. One key cause for this is that there are not enough vaccant positions at the countries employers available but a viable solution for this is to start more fiscal spending and in turn incentivise companies to create more jobs. The main reason for lack of open positions at various employers is that the company is rather restrictive in the creation of new jobs. Since the respective companies conclude that business outlook is rather dull they do not extend the portfolio, customers or investments and therefore also need less graduates. As an example, I applied as a working student at Deutsche Bahn but since the COVID-19 pandemic is still ongoing and the end of the confinements is still far away, they stopped all new applications and any ongoing hiring process. A solution that has often proven to be successful in times of a crisis is increased government spending. When the countries leadership changes their policy and starts incentivising the companies more investments are being made and the economy begins to grow. As a result, it often leads to a likewise increase in new businesses and more job offerings. There numerous examples that support this idea. For instance, Berlin suffered a big reduction of jobs in the last financial crisis. However, the city started to give subsidies specifically to the start-up industry and as a result many new investors were attracted and jobs were created that required high-skilled labour. In summary, there are many examples throughout the world that show that more spending by the government can lead to more job openings and in turn reduce the unemployment of highly qualified graduates.
In a wide range of countries there are several
highly
qualified graduates that are
currently
unemployed. One key cause for this is that there are not
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enough
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vaccant
positions at the countries employers available
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but
a viable solution for this is to
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start
more fiscal spending and in turn
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incentivise
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companies
to create more jobs.

The main reason for lack of open positions at various employers is that the
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company
is
rather
restrictive in the creation of
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new
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jobs
. Since the respective
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companies
conclude that business outlook is
rather
dull they do not extend the portfolio, customers or investments and
therefore
also
need
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less
graduates. As an example, I applied as a working student at
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Deutsche
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Bahn
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but
since the COVID-19 pandemic is
still
ongoing and the
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end
of the confinements is
still
far away, they
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stopped
all
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new
applications and any ongoing hiring process.

A solution that has
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often
proven to be successful in times of a crisis
is increased
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government
spending. When the
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countries
leadership
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changes
their policy and
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starts
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incentivising
the
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companies
more investments are
being made
and the economy
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begins
to grow.
As a result
, it
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often
leads to a
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in
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new
businesses and more
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job
offerings. There numerous examples that support this
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idea
.
For instance
, Berlin suffered a
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big
reduction of
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jobs
in the last financial crisis.
However
, the city
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started
to give subsidies
specifically
to the
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start
-up industry and
as a result
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many
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new
investors
were attracted
and
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jobs
were created
that required high-skilled
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labour
.

In summary, there are
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many
examples throughout the world that
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show
that more spending by the
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government
can lead to more
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job
openings and in turn
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reduce
the unemployment of
highly
qualified graduates.

IELTS essay In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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