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Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up.

Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up. jYD8
Motherliness is crucial as like as fathership. The relative significance of the concept, mothers are merely accountable for bearing the child and grown up their is a frequent topic of discussion. I am in fully disfavor with this statement due to fatherside is vital in many extend. First and foremost, to become a mother of a woman is impossible without the participation a man. This issue depends upon both the men and and the women. Exceptionality is, some women can be mother by taking test tube babies. Nevertheless, these ovum also collected from another men. Therefore, men and women both's participation is essential for the birth of the children. In addition, the men are the sperm doner only. For paradigm, a plethora of couple coming in break-up because of their husbands (male) are not able to produce reproduction cells during intercourse. Consequently, these women are unable to be a mother as they not getting sperm. However, in our community, it has been said that, the women are the major parameter, in contrast, they are like "a land without a farmer to cultivate" without the men. Besides, it is a familier scenerio of all father that, they play an important role to earn money for their family. Since by their help the fundamental needs can be fullfilled, they are the power of the family. Furthermore, in many societies they are key factor to support their children to develop. For instance, to admit in a good school, treatment in a better hospital, buying foods are the basic needs to nursing to their infant. Although mothers contribution also vital element, on the contrary, fathers undergo their lifes for the betterment of his family as well as children. In conclusion, parental co-opreation is major for having babies either the men or the women. Indeed, to lead a normal life children need the supports of their father side and mother side.
Motherliness is crucial as like as
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fathership
. The relative significance of the concept, mothers are
merely
accountable for bearing the child and grown up
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their
is a frequent topic of discussion.

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fully
disfavor with this statement due to
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fatherside
is vital in
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many
extend.

First
and foremost, to become a
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mother
of a woman is impossible without the participation a
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man
. This issue depends upon both the
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men
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and and
the
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women
.
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Exceptionality
is,
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some
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women
can be
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mother
by taking
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test
tube babies.
Nevertheless
,
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these ovum
also
collected from another
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men
.
Therefore
,
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men
and
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women
both's participation is essential for the birth of the children.
In addition
, the
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men
are the sperm
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doner
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only
. For paradigm, a plethora of couple coming in break-up
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because
of their husbands (male) are not able to produce reproduction cells during intercourse.
Consequently
, these
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women
are unable to be a
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mother
as
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they not getting
sperm.
However
, in our community, it has
been said
that, the
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women
are the major parameter,
in contrast
, they are like
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"
a land without a farmer to cultivate
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"
without the
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men
.

Besides
, it is a
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familier
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scenerio
of all father that, they play an
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important
role to earn money for their family. Since by their
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help
the fundamental needs can be
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fullfilled
, they are the power of the family.
Furthermore
, in
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many
societies they are key factor to support their children to develop.
For instance
, to admit in a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
school, treatment in a better hospital, buying foods are the basic needs to nursing to their infant. Although mothers contribution
also
vital element,
on the contrary
, fathers undergo their
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lifes
for the betterment of his family
as well
as children.

In conclusion
, parental
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co-opreation
is major for having babies either the
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men
or the
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women
.
Indeed
, to lead a normal life children need the supports of their father side and
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mother
side.
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IELTS essay Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up.

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5 paragraphs
316 words
6.0
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