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Some people support the development of agriculture like factory farming and the scientific farming.

Some people support the development of agriculture like factory farming and the scientific farming. oM5B
In the modern era, some individuals consider that the innovation of agriculture such as factory farming and the scientific creation of fruits and vegetables is very benefical, while others opine it is not good for humans as well as animals. I agree with lateral view which I will discuss in the further paragraphs. On the one hand, there are many responsible factors for this statement. First and the foremost, the main reason is increased the demand of food products due to which overpopulation. It has become difficult to produce food as per the requirements and also limited irrigation land. Moreover, because of population then more output of dairy and food products is required. Most of the people suffering from the starvation owing to shortage of food. Secondly, most of the wide choices of food items because scientific farming helps to grow vegetables and fruits even in extreme climate conditions because people can enjoy all those fruits and vegetables which can be grown only in particular region. On the other hand, I argued that for this statement. Firstly, it is very expensive process the adopt factory and scientific farming because most of the small scale poultrymen and agriculturists can not afford and they fail to compete with big organizations which do business of modified by plants and animals. Secondly, it is also affects on health as some products are not suitable for all and also lack in nutritional value. Moreover, these could be responsible for various health issues or diseases. In conclusion, although there are many reasons for factory farming and scientific farming like overpopulation because shortage of food and many health diseases.
In the modern era,
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some
individuals consider that the innovation of agriculture such as factory
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farming
and the
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scientific
creation of fruits and vegetables is
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very
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benefical
, while others opine it is not
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good
for humans
as well
as animals. I
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agree
with lateral view which I will discuss in the
further
paragraphs. On the one hand, there are
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many
responsible factors for this statement.
First
and the foremost, the main reason
is increased
the demand of
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food
products due to which overpopulation. It has become difficult to produce
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food
as per the requirements and
also
limited irrigation land.
Moreover
,
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because
of population then more output of dairy and
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food
products
is required
. Most of the
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people
suffering from the starvation owing to shortage of
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food
.
Secondly
, most of the wide choices of
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food
items
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because
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scientific
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farming
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helps
to grow vegetables and fruits even in extreme climate conditions
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because
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people
can enjoy all those fruits and vegetables which can
be grown
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only
in particular
region.
On the other hand
, I argued that for this statement.
Firstly
, it is
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very
expensive process
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factory and
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scientific
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farming
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because
most of the
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small
scale
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poultrymen
and agriculturists can not
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afford and
they fail to compete with
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big
organizations which do business of modified by plants and animals.
Secondly
, it is
also
affects on health as
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some
products are not suitable for all and
also
lack in nutritional value.
Moreover
, these could be responsible for various health issues or diseases.
In conclusion
, although there are
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many
reasons for factory
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farming
and
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scientific
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farming
like overpopulation
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because
shortage of
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food
and
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many
health diseases.
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IELTS essay Some people support the development of agriculture like factory farming and the scientific farming.

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  American English
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272 words
5.5
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