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Fatherhood is ass important as motherhood.

Fatherhood is ass important as motherhood. 70dWA

Fathers also should worry about upbringing their children as much as mothers. From the point of view that women are only people who choose if to have babies can leads on to the idea that it is their duty to take care of ofsprings. To begin with, men are not as soft as women and they are a bit rude than women. Usually men are not as patient as women and their voice can be frightening for toddlers. Thus if female members of the family touches and talk to the babies, they feel better. Moreover, Dadies are usually breadwinners and it means that they spend most of their time working to earn some money and eventually to provide their family with food, clothing and others. Last but not least, mothers are better than men in terms of nurturing toddlers. They can easily feed, wash teach simple things. However, female members of our society also wants to improve their career and better their position in their job.

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women
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only
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 are not as patient as You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgirlwifedaughtermothershe
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 and their voice can be frightening for toddlers. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Thus,
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Dadies
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and others
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but
 not least, mothers are better than This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsresidentscitizens
men
 in terms of nurturing toddlers. They can easily
 feed, wash teach simple things.

However
, female members of our society also
 wants to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :ameliorate
improve
 their career and better their position in their job. 