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Fast food is a part of life in many places and as a result, this leads to bad effects in lifestyle and diet. To what extent do you agree? v.1

Fast food is a part of life in many places and as a result, this leads to bad effects in lifestyle and diet. v. 1
I strongly agree. Fast food is a part of life in many places and as a result, this leads to bad effects on lifestyle and diet. In this essay I will give reasons for my opinion. To begin with, fast food is made from low quality ingredients and furthermore fast food is tempting because it is an easy and quick alternative to healthy eating. Firstly, components used to prepare fast food are usually obtained from recycled meats with added preservatives. For example 'McDonalds' does not use fresh meat for their hamburgers. Thus, this can cause unwanted effects in the human body such as obesity. In addition, this may be worsened by increased intake. Moreover, while this happens for meats, it also occurs in other types of food such as chips and desserts. Although this is good for companies to save money, it is unhealthy for society since it can induce diseases. Additionally, even though this is the case, large populations choose this option because of its convenience. To illustrate this, a person does not have time to prepare organic food and so they select something like 'Burger King'. Subsequently, this becomes part of their daily routine and is not beneficial. Meanwhile, addiction may also result which can be detrimental. Plus, many companies like 'McDonalds' exist and so accessibility is more readily available. In conclusion, poorly prepared quick foods may increase someone's weight to unhealthy levels. As well as that, obtaining it regularly may cause somebody to be addicted. Therefore, it is bad for living and as a dietary selection. So, I recommend cooking fresher foods that are much healthier.
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bad
effects on lifestyle and diet. In this essay I will give reasons for my opinion. To
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begin
with,
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fast
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is made
from low quality ingredients and
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is tempting
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because
it is an easy and quick alternative to healthy eating.

Firstly
, components
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used
to prepare
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food
are
usually
obtained from recycled meats with
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added
preservatives.
For example
'
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McDonalds
' does not
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use
fresh meat for their hamburgers.
Thus
, this can cause unwanted effects in the human body such as obesity.
In addition
, this may
be worsened
by increased intake.
Moreover
, while this happens for meats, it
also
occurs in other types of
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food
such as chips and desserts. Although this is
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good
for
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companies
to save money, it is unhealthy for society since it can induce diseases.

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this is the case, large populations choose this option
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of its convenience. To illustrate this, a person does not have time to prepare organic
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food and
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so
they select something like 'Burger King'.
Subsequently
, this becomes part of their daily routine and is not beneficial. Meanwhile, addiction may
also
result which can be detrimental. Plus,
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many
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companies
like '
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McDonalds
' exist and
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so
accessibility is more
readily
available.

In conclusion
,
poorly
prepared quick
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foods
may increase someone's weight to unhealthy levels.
As well
as that, obtaining it
regularly
may cause somebody to
be addicted
.
Therefore
, it is
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bad
for living and as a dietary selection.
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So
, I recommend cooking fresher
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foods
that are much healthier.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Fast food is a part of life in many places and as a result, this leads to bad effects in lifestyle and diet. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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