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Fast food increases obesity

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With the changing pace of life, fast food is becoming increasingly popular in some countries. It offers an affordable and accessible solution to hunger. Fast food is causing various medical issues for people like obesity and depression. To create an entry barrier, one possible solution for the government is to increase taxes on such products. There is a section of the consumer that only consumes fast food because it is cheap. This will act as a deterrent for them and reduce consumption. I disagree with raising taxes because of three reasons. First, it will only be effective if the taxes levied are considerable. It draws parallels to the raising taxes on oil prices. It is effective only if the alternative becomes affordable in comparison. Also, this solution allows the providers the opportunity to decrease base prices to maintain the prices for consumers. Second, the makers of fast food can react by lowering the cost of production. Using cheaper ingredients and increased volumes of additives will further make fast food unhealthier. Lastly, the biggest supporters of fast foods are people who eat them for taste. An increase in taxes will have no effect on consumption for these individuals. This is corroborated by the case study of McDonald’s Chicken McGrill. It was the cheapest burger introduced by McDonald’s in India at a price of Rs. 25. As consumers acquired the taste, the fast-food provider raised its prices to Rs. 45 in only one year. Yet there was no effect on the consumption of the product as it is still their most popular item on the menu. Consequently, in my opinion, raising prices by levying additional taxes by the government will not solve the increasing consumption problem.
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is becoming
increasingly
popular in
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some
countries. It offers an affordable and accessible solution to hunger.
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Fast
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food
is causing various medical issues for
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people
like obesity and depression.

To create an entry barrier, one possible solution for the
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government
is to increase
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taxes
on such products. There is a section of the consumer that
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only
consumes
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fast
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food
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because
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cheap
. This will act as a deterrent for them and
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reduce
consumption.

I disagree with raising
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taxes
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because
of three reasons.
First
, it will
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only
be effective if the
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taxes
levied are considerable. It draws parallels to the raising
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taxes
on oil
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prices
. It is effective
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only
if the alternative becomes affordable
in comparison
.
Also
, this solution
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allows
the providers the opportunity to decrease base
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prices
to maintain the
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prices
for consumers.

Second, the makers of
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fast
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food
can react by lowering the cost of production. Using cheaper ingredients and increased volumes of additives will
further
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make
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fast
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food
unhealthier.
Lastly
, the biggest supporters of
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fast
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foods
are
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people
who eat them for taste. An increase in
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taxes
will have no effect on consumption for these individuals.

This
is corroborated
by the case study of McDonald’s Chicken
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McGrill
. It was the cheapest burger introduced by McDonald’s in India at a
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price
of Rs. 25. As consumers acquired the taste, the
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fast
-food provider raised its
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prices
to Rs. 45 in
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only
one year.
Yet
there was no effect on the consumption of the product as it is
still
their most popular item on the menu.
Consequently
, in my opinion, raising
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prices
by levying additional
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taxes
by the
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government
will not solve the increasing consumption problem.
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IELTS essay Fast food increases obesity

Essay
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5 paragraphs
284 words
6.0
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