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The pie chats illustrate the proportion of water consumption for industry, agricultural and domestic purpose in six separate regions of the world.

The pie chats illustrate the proportion of water consumption for industry, agricultural and domestic purpose in six separate regions of the world. 55a1n
The pie chats illustrate the proportion of water consumption for industry, agricultural and domestic purpose in six separate regions of the world. Overall, it is clear that water used for agriculture accounts for the largest proportion, except for North America and Europe, mainly providing for industrial use. With regard to agricultural use, Central Asia is the area that uses the greatest level of water, at exactly 88%, followed by the figure for Africa and South East Asia, at 84% and 81% respectively. South America needs a smaller rate, with 71%, compared to one-third of the total consumption in Europe. In contrast, Europe area primarily uses water for industry, making up the highest percentage among the remaining regions, over a half of the total. Likewise, 48% of water is prioritized this purpose in North America, contrasting to 10% of that in South America. A noticeable pattern is that all six areas use an inconsiderable percentage of water for domestic purpose, apart from South America, with 19%, being the most significant consumption level.
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consumption for industry, agricultural and domestic purpose in six separate regions of the world.

Overall
, it is
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that
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for agriculture accounts for the largest proportion,
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except for
North America and Europe,
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providing for industrial
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.

With regard to agricultural
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, Central Asia is the area that
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the greatest level of
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water
, at exactly 88%, followed by the figure for Africa and South East Asia, at 84% and 81%
respectively
. South America needs a smaller rate, with 71%, compared to one-third of the total consumption in Europe.

In contrast
, Europe area
primarily
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uses
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for industry, making up the highest percentage among the remaining regions, over a half of the total.
Likewise
, 48% of
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is prioritized
this purpose in North America, contrasting to 10% of that in South America. A noticeable pattern is that all six areas
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use
an inconsiderable percentage of
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for domestic purpose, apart from South America, with 19%, being the most significant consumption level.
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IELTS essay The pie chats illustrate the proportion of water consumption for industry, agricultural and domestic purpose in six separate regions of the world.

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