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Farming is the backbone of every country but nowadays many youngsters hesitate to enter in this profession. Why is this the case and what can be done to avoid it?

Farming is the backbone of every country but nowadays many youngsters hesitate to enter in this profession. Why is this the case and what can be done to avoid it? QqKb
Admittedly, agriculture has been the primary source of every nations to develop themselves. however, many youngsters are not choose farming as there career. the reasons behind the occurrence can be attributed in to lack of income generation along with need more phisical attention. The ensuing paragraphs reveal the reasons in deataild way to provide solutions Firstly, getting lack of incomes are the main reason, why people do not choose the profession as a farmer. the line of reasoning is very clear that, as the threatening of insects as well as nature disasters, which distroy farmers plants horribly. To illustrate it, although thease disasters are not man maid process, people invest there fortune for agriculture land. so it will alliviating there income in that source. moreover, need more phisical attention is the another reason for avoiding farming in a professional way to make it more clear since, farming is the activity, which have lots of cultivation process in the land. So people do more extra energy to cultivate lands for making fruitfully. the more time spend with paddy field the more chances to get extra products in farm. Thus how these reasons influence people mind is clearly explained. Secondly, the above reasons can be easily removed in better solutions To illustrate it even though government gives some extra subsidies as well as policies, which helps farmers to settled in good financial atmosphere. to cite an example Kerala government provide a subsidy for rubber planters to support financial way because the rubber price was a gradual fall in stage. more over innovation of new technology has reduced human power. though machine used in agriculture areas, it will help the planters to do jobs in perfectly. it will alleviate not only energy but also time. hence by what means how these solutions aid the youngsters to select there career in farmingTo conclude, the above paragraphs reveal the reason and provide suitable solutions. However, government enhance some New policy to agriculture sector it will be change the youngsters mind to choose farming as a profession.
Admittedly
,
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agriculture
has been the primary source of every
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nations
to develop themselves.
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however
,
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many
youngsters are not
Consider using a past participle here: "chosen".
choose
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farming
as there career.
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the
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reasons
behind the occurrence can
be attributed
in to lack of income generation along with need more
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phisical
attention. The ensuing paragraphs reveal the
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reasons
in
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deataild
way to provide solutions

Firstly
, getting lack of incomes are the main
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reason
, why
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people
do not choose the profession as a farmer.
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the
line of reasoning is
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very
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clear
that, as the threatening of insects
as well
as nature disasters, which
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distroy
farmers plants
horribly
. To illustrate it, although
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thease
disasters are not
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man
maid process,
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people
invest there fortune for
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agriculture
land.
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so
it will
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alliviating
there income in that source.
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moreover
, need more
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phisical
attention is the another
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reason
for avoiding
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farming
Consider replacing "in a professional way" with the adverb for "professional"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a professional way
to
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make
it more
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clear
since,
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farming
is the activity, which have lots of cultivation process in the land.
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So
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people
do more extra energy to cultivate lands for making
fruitfully
.
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the
more time spend with paddy field the more chances to
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get
extra products in farm.
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Thus
how these
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reasons
influence
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people
mind is
clearly
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explained
.
Secondly
, the above
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reasons
can be
easily
removed in better solutions To illustrate it
even though
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government
gives
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some
extra subsidies
as well
as policies, which
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helps
farmers to settled in
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good
financial atmosphere.
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to
cite an example Kerala
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government
provide a subsidy for rubber planters to support financial way
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because
the rubber price was a gradual fall in stage.
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more
over innovation of new technology has
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reduced
human power.
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though
machine
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used
in
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agriculture
areas, it will
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help
the planters to do jobs in
perfectly
.
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it
will alleviate not
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only
energy
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but
also
time.
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hence
by what means how these solutions aid the youngsters to select there career in
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farmingTo
conclude, the above paragraphs reveal the
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reason
and provide suitable solutions.
However
,
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government
enhance
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some
New policy to
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agriculture
sector it will be
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change
the youngsters
The verb 'mind' is used with the gerund form: "mind choosing".
mind to choose
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farming
as a profession.
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IELTS essay Farming is the backbone of every country but nowadays many youngsters hesitate to enter in this profession. Why is this the case and what can be done to avoid it?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
341 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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