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Family more important than friends do you agree or disagree.

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Family and friends both are inseparable parts of human life. No doubt family is supreme in all aspects as compared to friends. I partially agree with the given statement. This essay will elaborate my views regarding this with help of some relevant examples. Family consists of parents and siblings who are the most essential part of human life. Family is considered as first school for child. Undoubtedly this is true for every single individual. Because its our family who rejoins us not only in relish moments but also in pathetic conditions. It is the foremost aspect of our life. In real world, no other relative cares for your sorrows as your family. Furthermore, as gradually we grow we came across others whom we choose to be our mates. We get different persons not only in school but also in college, we usually call them friends. Some of them may be close to us but others are considered only knowns. They remains our companions in our trivial mistakes as well in in enjoyable moments during our studies. Although, our friends are chosen as per our interest. It is clear that we make friends with whom we have common interests with us. It is well said, 'If your want to know a person, first know about his friends'. It is believed that we make close friends to those who are really like pea in a pond. Family relations are received by birth and definitely most securable as well as realible. Friends are not lesser if they are available during worst time. If they always stand before you in trouble shoot time, they are really essential part of your life. To recapitulate the idea that family is far above important than friends, but Some friends are even more realible in some certain cases. we cannot share anything bully with family members but we can share each and every single feeling with our close friends.
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Family
and
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both are inseparable parts of human life. No doubt
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family
is supreme in all aspects as compared to friends.

I
partially
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agree
with the
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given
statement. This essay will elaborate my views regarding this with
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help
of
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some
relevant examples.

Family consists of parents and siblings who are the most essential part of human life.
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Family
is considered
as
first
school for child.
Undoubtedly
this is true for every single individual.
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Because
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its
our
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family
who rejoins us not
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only
in relish moments
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but
also
in pathetic conditions. It is the foremost aspect of our life. In real world, no other relative cares for your sorrows as your family.

Furthermore
, as
gradually
we grow we came across others whom we choose to be our mates. We
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get
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different
persons not
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only
in school
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but
also
in college, we
usually
call them
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friends
.
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Some
of them may be close to us
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but
others
are considered
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only
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knowns
. They
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remains
our companions in our trivial mistakes
as well
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in in
enjoyable moments during our studies.

Although, our
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friends
are chosen
as per our interest. It is
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clear
that we
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make
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friends
with whom we have common interests with us. It is well said, 'If your want to know a person,
first
know about his friends'.
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It
is believed
that we
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make
close
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friends
to those who are
really
like pea in a pond.

Family relations
are received
by birth and definitely most
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securable
as well
as
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realible
.
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Friends
are not lesser if they are available during
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worst
time. If they always stand
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before
you in trouble shoot time, they are
really
essential part of your life.

To recapitulate the
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idea
that
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family
is far above
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important
than
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friends
,
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but
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Some
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friends
are even more
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realible
in
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some
certain cases.
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we
cannot share anything bully with
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family
members
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but
we can share each and every single feeling with our close
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friends
.
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IELTS essay Family more important than friends

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
321 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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