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Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement v.10

Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system with this statement v. 10
It is often argued that parents of children who study in private schools do not need to make a contribution through taxes to the state schools. I completely disagree with this point of view, and analysing the disadvantages of tax reduction and social benefits of imposing them will show this true. Perhaps the far most important reasons for not reducing taxes for families who pay for private education is to guarantee the equality between wealthy and poor people. It seems logical that affluent families often send their children to private schools since these places are more likely to provide better education. As a result, a tax relief is no more than an encouragement for those families to continue their actions, which only emphasise the unfairness. It is true that those parents have the right to allow their children to have the best education system, but on the whole of the society, government should try to let everyone have equal opportunites. Imposing taxes on families whose children are sent to private school can be beneficial for society as a whole, both the rich and the poor. One big advantage is that it can help all members of society to have a high quality public education system with the money from taxes contribution. This will result in a well-qualified workforce, and in turn a productive and prosperous country. For example, most company owners need well-educated and competent staffs, and a well-funded state schools can provide this In conclusion, I would support to the idea of not applying tax discount on families whose children attend private schools because of the concerns about unequality and impacts on public system.
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argued that parents of
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who study in
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schools
do not need to
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make
a contribution through
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taxes
to the state
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schools
. I completely disagree with this point of view, and
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the disadvantages of
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reduction and social benefits of imposing them will
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this true.

Perhaps the far most
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reasons for not reducing
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for
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families
who pay for
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private
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education
is to guarantee the equality between wealthy and poor
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people
. It seems logical that affluent
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families
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send
their
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to
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private
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since these places are more likely to provide better
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education
.
As a result
, a
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tax
relief is no more than an encouragement for those
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families
to continue their actions, which
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the unfairness. It is true that those parents have the right to
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their
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children
to have the best
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education
system,
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on the whole
of the society,
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should try to
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let
everyone have equal
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opportunites
.

Imposing
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on
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whose
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are
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sent
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school
can be beneficial for society as a whole, both the rich and the poor. One
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big
advantage is that it can
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help
all members of society to have a high quality public
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education
system with the money from
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taxes
contribution. This will result in a well-qualified workforce, and in turn a productive and prosperous country.
For example
, most
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company
owners need well-educated and competent staffs, and a well-funded state
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schools
can provide
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this


In conclusion
, I would support to the
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idea
of not applying
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discount on
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families
whose
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children
attend
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schools
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of the concerns about
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unequality
and impacts on public system.
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IELTS essay Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system with this statement v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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