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As most people spend a major part of their adult life st work, job satisfaction is an important element of Individual well being. What factors that contribute to job satisfaction. How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers. v.1

As most people spend a major part of their adult life st work, job satisfaction is an important element of Individual well being. What factors that contribute to job satisfaction. How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers. v. 1
In the recent years, businesses are putting a lot of effort to hire employees with better social abilities beside their experience and educations. Indeed, social skills nowadays are pretty important, due to the improvement of the world. In this essay, I am going to shed some light on the advantages and disadvantages of this trend. The most essential thing in this course of time is to be social and be able to convince people. Especially, for companies which need to sell their product, it is so important to have someone who can compel consumers. Without a doubt, sociable worker not only will increase the sells of a company, but also can be able to promote the products. For example, if someone is trying to but something they need they definitely will be enticed by a great ploy and someone who can encourage them to buy that product. On the flip side, for the businesses which are not in direct communication with costumers this skill is not that influential. Furthermore, the other skills come first in this situation such as: teamwork, education, experience and hard working. In addition to this, I suppose there are different qualifications that should be considered in different type of career. So, this trend should be divided into two categories. The first, undoubtedly, should be the jobs which need to be defined by an expert and on the other hand, the jobs that does not require much social abilities. In conclusion, above all information that has been mentioned, I think social skills sometime have a huge impact on both companies and workers. So, trying to have good qualifications beside social skills will benefit all employees.
In the recent years, businesses are putting
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a lot of
effort to hire employees with better
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social
abilities beside their experience and educations.
Indeed
,
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social
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skills
nowadays are pretty
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important
, due to the improvement of the world. In this essay, I am going to shed
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some
light on the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

The most essential thing in this course of time is to be
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social
and be able to convince
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people
.
Especially
, for
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companies
which need to sell their product, it is
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so
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important
to have someone who can compel consumers. Without a doubt, sociable worker not
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only
will increase the sells of a
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company
,
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but
also
can be able to promote the products.
For example
, if someone is trying to
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but
something they need they definitely will
be enticed
by a great ploy and someone who can encourage them to
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buy
that product.

On the flip side, for the businesses which are not in direct communication with costumers this
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skill
is not that influential.
Furthermore
, the other
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skills
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come
first
in this situation such as: teamwork, education, experience and
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hard working
.
In addition
to this, I suppose there are
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different
qualifications that should
be considered
in
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different
type of career.
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So
, this trend should
be divided
into two categories. The
first
,
undoubtedly
, should be the jobs which need to
be defined
by an expert and
on the other hand
, the jobs that does not require much
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
abilities.

In conclusion
,
above all
information that has
been mentioned
, I
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think
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social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
sometime have a huge impact on both
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
and workers.
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So
, trying to have
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good
qualifications beside
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social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
will benefit all employees.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay As most people spend a major part of their adult life st work, job satisfaction is an important element of Individual well being. What factors that contribute to job satisfaction. How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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