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Extracurricular activities

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At school, I have been a resident assistant for 2 years. As a resident assistant I am responsible for the care and co-management of a building of more than students. I gain valuable skills planning events, being the leader of a floor, and working as a team to effectively manage resident issues. I develop a lot of those same skills in student government. Last month our governing board managed events for our senior class of 100 students. I took a leadership role in event planning for our school dances and seasonal events, all of which had about an 75% attendance rate.
At school, I have been a resident assistant for 2 years. As a resident assistant I am responsible for the care and co-management of a building of more than students. I gain valuable
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events
, being the leader of a floor, and working as a team to
effectively
manage resident issues. I develop
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those same
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skills
in student
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government
. Last month our governing board managed
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events
for our senior
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class
of 100 students. I took a leadership role in
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planning for our school dances and seasonal
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, all of which had about an 75% attendance rate.

IELTS essay Extracurricular activities

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
101 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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