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Explain why many countries have staked claims in Antartica, and why national interests have not been pursued. v.1

Explain why many countries have staked claims in Antartica, and why national interests have not been pursued. v. 1
Due to the era of technology, many employees are changing the job at a rapid pace. This trend is mainly owing to better job prospects and an unfriendly environment with employers. However, there are several measures which employees can take for having a good job in the future. The first reason why many job-seekers changes employment is because of the unfriendly relationship with the employers. As we are living in the era of globalization so many employers are struggling to satisfy the needs of the customers by giving them the best quality of goods at a low price, so they always expect from their employees to work more to achieve the targets of the company. As a result, most employers do not behave well with their employees and compel them to look for another job. Another reason why some employees shift their jobs is for having a better salary or position in another company. It is true that after having an experience of two to three years, the majority of employees seem to change the job for getting a hefty salary or having a managerial position in the new company. For example, research conducted by the BBC found that 55% of the employees in all over the world shift from one company to another one in order to have a managerial position or bigger amount of salary. However, in order to resolve this problem, many employees should update themselves by doing an online short term course in order to stand in the market. This is because the majority of companies are looking for those candidates who are up to date with the market challenges and have vast knowledge to fulfil the vision of the company, resulting in such candidates will not be forced to change the job. Another solution is to work remotely. Nowadays, everyone in the world is connected to the internet and it is now possible to communicate with anyone either in the mail or messages, hence, many employers need to encourage their employees to work remotely to have a healthy environment in the company. For example, if entrepreneurs allow their employees sometimes to work from their home, not only will it boost their morale but also increase the productivity of the company. In conclusion, the competitive era leads to many job-seekers to change the job either for a better salary, managerial position or unfriendly relationship with the existing employers. Only when such employees to update themselves with the current market needs by doing short term courses and most employers promote working remotely to their employees, will this problem be solved.
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employees
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at a rapid pace. This trend is
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job
prospects and an
unfriendly
environment with
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employers
.
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employees
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having
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goods
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company
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employers
do not behave well with their
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employees
and compel them to look for another
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job
. Another reason why
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employees
shift their
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is for
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having
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position
in another
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company
. It is true that after
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having
an experience of two to three years, the majority of
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employees
seem to
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change
the
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job
for getting a hefty salary or
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having
a managerial
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position
in the new
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company
.
For example
, research conducted by the BBC found that 55% of the
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employees
in all over the world shift from one
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company
to another one in order to have a managerial
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position
or bigger amount of salary.

However
, in order to resolve this problem,
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many
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employees
should update themselves by doing an online short term course in order to stand in the market. This is
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because
the majority of
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companies
are looking for those candidates who are up to date with the market challenges and have vast knowledge to fulfil the vision of the
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company
, resulting in such candidates will not
be forced
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change
the
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job
. Another solution is to
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work
remotely
. Nowadays, everyone in the world
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possible to communicate with anyone either in the mail or messages,
hence
,
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employers
need to encourage their
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employees
to
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work
remotely
to have a healthy environment in the
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company
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, the competitive era leads to
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many
job-seekers to
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change
the
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job
either for a better salary, managerial
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position
or
unfriendly
relationship with the existing
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employers
.
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employees
to update themselves with the
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current
market needs by doing short term courses and most
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employers
promote working
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, will this problem
be solved
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The man who does not know other languages, unless he is a man of genius, necessarily has deficiencies in his ideas.
Victor Hugo

IELTS essay Explain why many countries have staked claims in Antartica, and why national interests have not been pursued. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
433 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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