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Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. Do agree or disagree? v.5

Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. Do agree or disagree? v. 5
It is true that the majority of people want to be happy in their lives, however, is still uncertain its definition. This essay will examine the causes of it, as well as common needs that are shared for us with regard to achieving happiness. Happiness is difficult to define because it means something different to each individual person. For example, the sense of joyfulness is experimented in different ways, for some people could be the sense of realization in their career, or the idea of having a family. In this way, each person has a unique form to experiment it and proper ideas about it. Furthermore, happiness is something abstract, and because of that is impossible to measure in a scale level. In fact, even the wealthiest person in the world can be the most sadness, and the most appreciate one as celebrities or famous can suffer from depression. Although it seems almost impossible to give a precise definition, most people agree that there are certain preconditions achieving it. Firstly, as human beings, personal relationships are a fundamental element to consider. According to the latest researches, studies made in the UK have shown that people who are more socially connected with family, friends and community, feel happier than people in isolation. Moreover, personal realization has a great value in each person`s life. Indeed, the sensation of achieving our dreams in professional and personal ambitions, are often defined by many as our purpose in life. By way of conclusion, even happiness is difficult to define because it is particular to each individual, I believe that overall considerations should be detected to help us to experience it.
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want to be happy in their
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as well
as common needs that
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for us with regard to achieving happiness.

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because
it means something
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different
to each individual
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person
.
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, the sense of joyfulness
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in
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different
ways, for
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some
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people
could be the sense of realization in their career, or the
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idea
of having a family. In this way, each
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person
has a unique form to experiment it and proper
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ideas
about it.
Furthermore
, happiness is something abstract, and
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because
of
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impossible to measure in a scale level. In fact, even the wealthiest
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person
in the world can be the most sadness, and the most appreciate one as celebrities or
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famous
can suffer from depression.

Although it seems almost impossible to give a precise definition, most
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people
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agree
that there are certain preconditions achieving it.
Firstly
, as human beings, personal relationships are a fundamental element to consider. According to the latest researches, studies made in the UK have shown that
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people
who are more
socially
connected with family, friends and community, feel happier than
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people
in isolation.
Moreover
, personal realization has a great value in each
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often
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as our purpose in life.

By way of conclusion, even happiness is difficult to define
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because
it is particular to each individual, I believe that
overall
considerations should
be detected
to
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help
us to experience it.
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IELTS essay Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. Do agree or disagree? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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