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Every year thousands of students go overseas to study. Although many benefit from the experience, others go home disappointed.

Every year thousands of students go overseas to study. Although many benefit from the experience, others go home disappointed. 0n321
Studying abroad has become desires and targets of many students. Some people think that students can gain more experience from other countries, but others reject this point. This essay will identify advantages and disadvantages of studying overseas. As far as the benefits are concerned, studying in other countries can create opportunities for students to develop their social skills and knowledge. Initially, the developed countries have high-quality education systems so as to serve students. To illustrate, majority of universities in Australia, America or England have well-educated lecturers and they usually focus on investing in improving material facilities. Thus, students will be studied in professional education environment and conditions. Secondly, academic degrees from universities which have good reputation are accepted in many countries. Consequently, students can have many opportunities to secure well-paid jobs and work in other countries. Finally, when people go overseas, they can widen their knowledge due to different culture, language and traveling. On the other hand, studying overseas also have negative impacts on lives of students. For example, when living in other countries, they have to control their finance by themselves. There are some students whose total cost of studying abroad are greater than others due to the high cost of living. In addition, in the beginning of period, some students will find living far from their countries difficult to adapt because of different culture and tradition. For instant, students may feel uncomfortable when the weather and cuisine are distinguished from those in their countryside, so they can get some diseases. To sum up, although going to other countries to study have some drawbacks, it can bring many value benefits. People can broaden their knowledge and have many chances to obtain the high salary.
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others reject this point. This essay will identify advantages and disadvantages of
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As far as the benefits
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studying
in
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other
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countries
can create opportunities for
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students
to develop their social
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skills
and knowledge.
Initially
, the developed
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countries
have high-quality education systems
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serve
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students
. To illustrate,
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majority of
universities in Australia, America or England have well-educated
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lecturers and
they
usually
focus on investing in improving material facilities.
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,
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students
will
be studied
in professional education environment and conditions.
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, academic degrees from universities which have
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good
reputation are
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accepted
in
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countries
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students
can have
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many
opportunities to secure well-paid jobs and work in
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other
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countries
.
Finally
, when
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people
go overseas, they can widen their knowledge due to
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different
culture, language and traveling.

On the
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hand,
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countries
, they
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have to
control their finance by themselves. There are
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some
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students
whose total cost of
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abroad are greater than others due to the high cost of living.
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will find living far from their
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difficult to adapt
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different
culture and tradition. For instant,
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students
may feel uncomfortable when the weather and cuisine
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from those in their countryside,
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they can
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diseases.

To sum up, although going to
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countries
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drawbacks, it can bring
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many
value benefits.
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People
can broaden their knowledge and have
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chances to obtain the high salary.
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IELTS essay Every year thousands of students go overseas to study. Although many benefit from the experience, others go home disappointed.

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4 paragraphs
285 words
6.0
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