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Every year, crime rate is sharply increasing. Although, it is considered by some that the Capital Punishment is the efficient way to decrease the crime rate. While there are others who believe that it can be reduced by taking proper decisions. In my opinion, both are equally important to eradicate unlawful act.

Every year, crime rate is sharply increasing. Although, it is considered by some that the Capital Punishment is the efficient way to decrease the crime rate. While there are others who believe that it can be reduced by taking proper decisions. In my opinion, both are equally important to eradicate unlawful act. On the one hand, I personal think that for some illegal acts like rape, murder and drug trafficking, death sentence is the best way to deterrent crimes. This is the only harsh way to punish the criminals. Moreover, life imprisonment is also the best punishment, but many criminals come out on bail or by using political power. For example, as per the latest survey conducted by BBC news, out of 100 criminals, only 80 get convicted by court. In that 80 individuals, 40 get out on bail by showing political influence which is a major concern. Government should implement strict law and ensure that no culprit escape from the punishment. On the other hand, death sentence cannot be given to all wrongdoers, but it has to be chosen based on the offence. Some crimes like robbery should be punished by imposing fine and jail term. For instance, One of my friends violated traffic rule by over speeding due to some emergency issue, but he was not jailed because court understood his situation and let him go by imposing fine of 10, 000 rupees. Likewise, the judgement has to be implemented based on the act.

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crime
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crime
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While
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reduced
 by taking proper decisions. In my opinion, both are equally
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important
 to eradicate unlawful act.

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I personal
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think
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some
 illegal acts like rape, murder and drug trafficking, death sentence is the best way to deterrent You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcaselawlessnessviolationfelonymisdemeanorinfraction
crimes
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only
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but
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many
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come
 out on bail or by using political power. For example
, as per the latest survey conducted by BBC news, out of 100 criminals, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
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get
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get
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Government
 should implement strict law and ensure that no culprit escape from the punishment.

On the other hand
, death sentence cannot be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 to all wrongdoers, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
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has to
be chosen
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offence
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Some
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crimes
 like robbery should be punished
 by imposing fine and jail term. For instance
, One of my friends violated traffic This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :requirement
rule
 by over speeding due to This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 emergency issue, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 he was not jailed This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 court understood his situation and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
let
 him go by imposing fine of 10, 000 rupees. Likewise
, the judgement This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:oughts to
has to
be implemented
 based on the act. 