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Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What is the cause of this? What measures can the international community take to meet this demand? v.7

Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What is the cause of this? What measures can the international community take to meet this demand? v. 7
Food is an urgent necessity that people need and with the passes of time, the urgency of subsistence is growing day by day. Overpopulation and the low yielding of grains are the reasons for the scarcity of food. Some countermeasures like raising awareness of excessive people and increasing the production of the meal could be the solution to supply enough food for human beings. To begin with, since people are near to the future, more and more humans have populated this world. For that reason, people are occupying the increasing number of agricultural places to build their habitation. As a result, the manufacturing of crops is very low. For example, in China, the report of an article published in 1970 showed that the Chinese populace reached high level in comparison to the other countries so that citizens changed their agricultural land into their residents, because the inhabitants in cities and towns are quite low, which, consequently, caused on a drastic fall on crop production. Thus, the main problem of food is a massive population and a lower amount of crop production. To counter this menace, the nations from all over the world should take some necessary steps. Firstly, governments must organize different types of events, seminars to make people conscious about the increasing number of people that have an adverse effect on the population. For instance, as people are growing at an alarming rate, food production is not soaring, because people tend to build houses, where vegetables should grow. Eventually, Denizens are getting less bread to eat, whereas excessive people in the globe go to sleep without food. If these types of awareness propagate in every nook and corner of the society, the issue of the demand for food might decrease. Therefore, each leader from all the subcontinents ought to come forward to raise awareness among people. In conclusion, the growing demand for food is skyrocketing each day. The reason is that a very low production of crops and the toll of the population increases these days. To solve this problem, the authorities around the world have to take measured steps like making people aware of the negative outcome of a huge population of a country, and a little crop grows to meet the needs.
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Food
is an urgent necessity that
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people
need and with the passes of time, the urgency of subsistence is growing day by day. Overpopulation and the
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low
yielding of grains are the reasons for the scarcity of
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food
.
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Some
countermeasures like raising awareness of excessive
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people
and increasing the
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production
of the meal could be the solution to supply
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enough
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food
for human beings.

To
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begin
with, since
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people
are near to the future, more and more humans have populated this world. For that reason,
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people
are occupying the increasing number of agricultural places to build their habitation.
As a result
, the manufacturing of
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crops
is
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very
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low
.
For example
, in China, the report of an article published in 1970
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showed
that the Chinese populace reached high level
in comparison
to the other countries
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so
that citizens
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changed
their agricultural land into their residents,
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because
the inhabitants in cities and towns are quite
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low
, which,
consequently
, caused on a drastic fall on
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crop
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production
.
Thus
, the main problem of
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food
is a massive
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population
and a lower amount of
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crop
production.

To counter this menace, the nations from all over the world should take
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some
necessary steps.
Firstly
,
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governments
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must
organize
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different
types of
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events
, seminars to
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make
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people
conscious about the increasing number of
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people
that have an adverse effect on the
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population
.
For instance
, as
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people
are growing at an alarming rate,
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food
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production
is not soaring,
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because
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people
tend to build
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houses
, where vegetables should grow.
Eventually
, Denizens are getting less bread to eat, whereas excessive
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people
in the globe go to sleep without
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food
. If these types of awareness propagate in every nook and corner of the society, the issue of the demand for
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food
might decrease.
Therefore
, each leader from all the subcontinents ought to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
forward to raise awareness among
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.

In conclusion
, the growing demand for
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food
is skyrocketing each day. The reason is that a
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very
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low
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production
of
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crops
and the toll of the
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population
increases these days. To solve this problem, the authorities around the world
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have to
take measured steps like making
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people
aware of the
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negative
outcome of a huge
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population
of a country, and a
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little
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crop
grows to
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meet
the needs.
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IELTS essay Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What is the cause of this? What measures can the international community take to meet this demand? v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
375 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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