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Every culture throughout time has recorded its history in one way or another In what ways can history be passed on to the next generation Why is history important to society v.1

Every culture throughout time has recorded its history in one way or another In what ways can history be passed on to the next generation Why is history important to society v. 1
Marriage is the one of the wonderful phases of the life which can switch the life of both individuals. It is the union of the two hearts apart from the willingness of others rather than their love. There is a plethora of reasons to get married, but many couples prefer to get married before the youth of 30 and some people used to do their wedding after 30’s and even some doesn’t like to get married, although it is based on the older age categories its one’s own wish to get married. As I said before, it relates to the willingness of the both beings, it also makes a best huge impact on the society and for them too. Impact the way of their both living standard from one own need to their needs, on the other hand coming to society based it can be a best for their rise in their career indeed for the survive of their family. I totally agree with this concept, whereas nowadays we can see there are enormous typical issues related to the reproduction, cyst formation and so on, which leads to childlessness. These are the problems where faced by the couples from the origin of food habits and physical well being, so considering the fact getting married before maturity of 30 will lead to a happy life and a good family. Getting married before youth 30 is best things which plays a major role in the society, which in terms of making up responsibilities for the family, loving ones and the future of their heirs. They will be focused on their family's future and keep on their career improvisation which leads to their organisational growth which have an impact on the community, as their range of responsibilities to be added to them. They also respected by the humanity which need to be deserved by them.
Marriage is the one of the wonderful phases of the life which can switch the life of both individuals. It is the union of the two hearts apart from the willingness of others
rather
than their
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love
. There is a plethora of reasons to
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get
married,
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but
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many
couples prefer to
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get
married
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before
the youth of 30 and
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some
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people
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used
to do their wedding after
Apostrophes aren't needed for decades: "30s".
30’s
and even
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some
doesn’t like to
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get
married, although it
is based
on the older age categories its one’s
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own
wish to
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get
married.

As I said
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before
, it relates to the willingness of the both beings, it
also
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makes
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a
best huge impact on the society and for them too. Impact the way of their both living standard from one
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own
need to their needs,
on the other hand
coming to society based it can be
Use "the" with the superlative.
a
best for their rise in their career
indeed
for
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the survive
of their family.

I
totally
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agree
with this concept, whereas nowadays we can
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see
there are enormous typical issues related to the reproduction, cyst formation and
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so
on, which leads to childlessness. These are the problems where faced by the couples from the origin of food habits and physical
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well being
,
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so
considering the fact getting married
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before
maturity of 30 will lead to a happy life and a
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good
family.

Getting married
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before
youth 30
A determiner is probably missing here: "is the best".
is best
things which plays a major role in the society, which in terms of making up responsibilities for the family, loving
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ones
and the future of their heirs. They will
be focused
on their family's future and
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keep
on their career improvisation which leads to their
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organisational
growth which have an impact on the community, as their range of responsibilities to be
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added
to them. They
also
respected by the humanity which need to
be deserved
by them.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Every culture throughout time has recorded its history in one way or another In what ways can history be passed on to the next generation Why is history important to society v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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