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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.31

The wealth of a nation is dependent on the state of mind of its citizens. There is a saying that goes thus; "A healthy man is a wealthy man". I strongly agree that health services should be made free for the citizens of everything country. The percentage of dependents in a country is on the rise compared to the independent. A country where its citizens pay taxes and carry out their due deligence to ensure that law and order of its country is upheld should in turn give it's citizenry the benefit of a free health care. It is saddening to hear that a child dies just because his/her parent could not afford health care bills that are not up to thousands of Naira. It is unfair to the human rights of a human who was involved in an accident to be left to die because there was nobody to foot his/her medical bills. We have thousands of governmental and non governmental organisations who do not carry out their corporate social responsibilities simply because they have the power to boycott the system. Their organisations are located in the communities of the "poor masses" who can barely feed themselves and yet they turn the other way and let them die. These people opened their communities/homes to them without conditions; it is only just that they get free health care to preserve their generation. If the masses cannot access healthcare and they keep dying, their number reduces and the country gradually crumbles to the ground. The masses are the people who make a country and when they are neglected then there is no country. If 80% of the masses who ought to grow food crops via farming, building houses, road construction, control law and order, nurture the growing generations are all hunted by health related crisis, who then is left to grow the economy of such a country? The introduction of free health care in some sectors of health in Nigeria has tremendously reduced the infant mortality rate. The government in partnership with some of its agencies put in place a system where all babies are given vaccines for free. One of such vaccines that drastically reduced infant/child mortality is the Polio vaccine which is tagged "Kick Polio Out" campaign. This program has been ongoing for a couple of years now. It is safe to say that if the program wasn't set to action, the number of mortalities would have been recorded in millions if not billions, reasons being that the majority of children affected by polio are the ones birthed by malnourished mothers who couldn't afford health care through their term of pregnancy. A nation is termed powerful when the well being of its people becomes its sole mandate.
The wealth of a nation is dependent on the state of mind of its citizens. There is a saying that goes
thus
;
"
A healthy
man
is a wealthy
man
"
.

I
strongly
agree
that
health
services should
be made
free
for the citizens of everything
country
. The percentage of dependents in a
country
is on the rise compared to the independent.

A
country
where its citizens pay taxes and carry out their due
deligence
to ensure that law and order of its
country
is upheld
should in turn give
it's
citizenry the benefit of a
free
health
care.

It is saddening to hear that a child
dies
just
because
his/her parent could not afford
health
care
bills that are not up to thousands of
Naira
. It is unfair to the human rights of a human
who
was involved
in an accident to be
left
to
die
because
there was nobody to foot his/her medical bills.

We have thousands of governmental and
non governmental
organisations
who
do not carry out their corporate social responsibilities
simply
because
they have the power to boycott the system. Their
organisations
are located
in the communities of the
"
poor masses
"
who
can
barely
feed
themselves and
yet
they turn the other way and
let
them
die
. These
people
opened their communities/homes to them without conditions; it is
only
just
that they
get
free
health
care
to preserve their generation.

If the masses cannot access
healthcare and
they
keep
dying, their number
reduces
and the
country
gradually
crumbles to the ground.

The masses are the
people
who
make
a
country
and when they
are neglected
then there is no
country
. If 80% of the masses
who
ought to grow food crops via farming, building
houses
, road construction, control law and order, nurture the growing generations are all hunted by
health
related crisis,
who
then is
left
to grow the economy of such a country?

The introduction of
free
health
care
in
some
sectors of
health
in Nigeria has
tremendously
reduced
the infant mortality rate. The
government
in partnership with
some
of its agencies put in place a system where all babies are
given
vaccines for free.

One of such vaccines that
drastically
reduced
infant/child mortality is the Polio vaccine which
is tagged
"
Kick Polio Out
"
campaign. This program has been ongoing for a couple of years
now
. It is safe to say that if the program wasn't set to action, the number of
mortalities
would have
been recorded
in millions if not billions, reasons being that the majority of children
affected
by polio are the ones birthed by malnourished mothers
who
couldn't afford
health
care
through their term of pregnancy.

A nation
is termed
powerful when the
well being
of its
people
becomes
its sole mandate.
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IELTS essay Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive.

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458 words
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