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Ever since my childhood, I have been a curious and eager child. Computers have been the biggest part of my life. Now with each passing year, my interest has grown manifolds.

Ever since my childhood, I have been a curious and eager child. Computers have been the biggest part of my life. Now with each passing year, my interest has grown manifolds. YdV8r
Ever since my childhood, I have been a curious and eager child. Computers have been the biggest part of my life. Now with each passing year, my interest has grown manifolds. I am particularly interested in studying data science since I realized that it can be used to develop marketing models and that companies these days are starting to analyze big datasets to measure consumers’ product preferences and make use of it to determine their future sales. The multi-disciplinary field of data science combines computer science with probability, statistics, analysis and management skills. Data science is also the answer to the most complex business and practical questions. I believe that data science is the future of Artificial intelligence and it is beneficial to learn about it more to cater to my interests. I hope to use the knowledge I will gain from my masters’ degree to perform meaningful analysis of large sets of data. I have been intensively involved in learning maths throughout my education and had a particular interest in the subject. I am familiar with concepts such as multivariable calculus, elementary statistics, and probability theory. I have also studied data structures which were the beginning of my interest and played a crucial role in forming my choices. I have interned at two different firms that specialized in performing data analytics task to help research for companies aiming to start new projects. My project made extensive use of python and C++ and I have learned a lot about these programming languages during my internship. I had to analyze real-time purchasing and location data to determine the preferences of potential consumers. I wish to use my knowledge and skills in data science to provide well-sustained research and analysis for companies. Throughout my graduation and practical work experience, I was fortunate to gain some required experience in the domain of analytics. I believe that curiosity and eagerness to learn can take you places. I wish to learn everything I can in the field of data science as I believe there is still a long way to go for me. This masters’ program will thus be a step towards achieving my dreams. This program will train me in different methods of statistical analysis, and programming knowledge needed to continue with my goal to provide research for companies. (University name) has been my dream institute to pursue this course as I wish to take the benefits of the expert knowledge provided by the skilled faculty of the university. Through this degree, I aim to enhance my knowledge and expertise in programming and mathematics. After completing my MS, I wish to get into the field of Health analytics as I believe that the medical industry will be subjected to change and growth with technological advancement. The practical knowledge will give me the technical expertise to pursue my career as a data scientist.
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Now
with each passing year, my
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interest
has grown manifolds. I am
particularly
interested in studying
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data
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science
since I realized that it can be
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used
to develop marketing models and that
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companies
these days are starting to analyze
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big
datasets to measure consumers’ product preferences and
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make
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use
of it to determine their future sales.

The multi-disciplinary field of
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data
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science
combines computer
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science
with probability, statistics,
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analysis
and management
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skills
.
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Data
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science
is
also
the answer to the most complex business and practical questions. I
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believe
that
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data
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science
is the future of Artificial intelligence and it is beneficial to learn about it more to cater to my
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interests
. I hope to
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use
the
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knowledge
I will gain from my masters’ degree to perform meaningful
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analysis
of large sets of data.

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I
have been
intensively
involved in learning
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maths
throughout my education and had a particular
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interest
in the subject.
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I
am familiar with concepts such as multivariable calculus, elementary statistics, and probability theory.
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I
have
also
studied
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data
structures which were the beginning of my
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interest
and played a crucial role in forming my choices.

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I
have interned at two
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different
firms that specialized in performing
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data
analytics task to
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help
research for
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companies
aiming to
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start
new projects. My project made extensive
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use
of python and C++ and I have learned a lot about these programming languages during my internship. I had to analyze real-time purchasing and location
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data
to determine the preferences of potential consumers. I
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wish
to
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use
my
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knowledge
and
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skills
in
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data
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science
to provide well-sustained research and
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analysis
for
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companies
.

Throughout my graduation and practical work experience, I was fortunate to gain
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some
required experience in the domain of analytics. I
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believe
that curiosity and eagerness to learn can take you places. I
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wish
to learn everything I can in the field of
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data
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science
as I
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believe
there is
still
a long way to go for me.

This masters’ program will
thus
be a step towards achieving my dreams. This program will train me in
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different
methods of statistical
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analysis
, and programming
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knowledge
needed to continue with my goal to provide research for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
. (University name) has been my dream institute to pursue this course as I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wish
to take the benefits of the expert
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knowledge
provided by the skilled faculty of the university.

Through this degree, I aim to enhance my
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knowledge
and expertise in programming and mathematics. After completing my MS, I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wish
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
into the field of Health analytics as I
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believe
that the medical industry will
be subjected
to
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change
and growth with technological advancement. The practical
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knowledge
will give me the technical expertise to pursue my career as a
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data
scientist.
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IELTS essay Ever since my childhood, I have been a curious and eager child. Computers have been the biggest part of my life. Now with each passing year, my interest has grown manifolds.

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
478 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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