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Eventually, the examples here provided proved how powerful individual’s actions are over government policies, and how impactful these could be for the next generations.

Eventually, the examples here provided proved how powerful individual’s actions are over government policies, and how impactful these could be for the next generations. Pk9Rd
There has been increasing debate globally regarding environmental protection. Some people assert that only government officials and major companies can influence environmental related decisions, since individual persons are powerless to make such decisions. I agree with this viewpoint to a moderate extent. Government bodies have the power to create and implement policies that can have widespread influence on a community’s outcomes. For instance, the government in Japan has imposed strict regulations to prevent overfishing to ensure preservation of the marine environment. As a result, all Japanese fishermen are obligated to keep to these rules. Similarly, big companies are also at the optimal position to influence consumer choices as mass manufacturers of products. As an example, if they chose to produce products that are environmentally friendly, such as using biodegradable materials instead of plastic packaging, they can help to reduce waste at a mass level. These examples illustrate the sphere of influence that government officials and large companies have to improve our environment. On the other hand, I feel that every individual is also is capable of making conscious choice and taking steps to protect our environment. For example, if one chooses to use recyclable bags instead of disposable plastic bags, he or she can help to save over 100 plastic bags each year. People socialize often, and can influence others actions through modelling positive and environmentally conscious behaviours. Even though these actions may seem insignificant in the short term, the collective efforts can have a huge influence in time to come. In conclusion, I agree that the government and big companies exert strong influences on our environment wellness through executing policies, as well as through the manufacturing of environmentally friendly consumer products. However, I also believe that individuals have the capacity to exert personal choices and potentially influence their friends to protect the environment in the long-term trajectory
There has been increasing debate globally regarding environmental protection.
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people
assert that
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only
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government
officials and major
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companies
can influence

environmental related decisions, since individual persons are powerless to
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make
such

decisions. I
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agree
with this viewpoint to a moderate extent.

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Government
bodies have the power to create and implement policies that can have

widespread
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influence
on a community’s outcomes.
For instance
, the
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government
in

Japan has imposed strict regulations to
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prevent
overfishing to ensure preservation of

the marine
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environment
.
As a result
, all Japanese fishermen
are obligated
to
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keep
to

these
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rules
.
Similarly
,
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big
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companies
are
also
at the optimal position to influence

consumer choices as mass manufacturers of products. As an example, if they chose

to produce products that are
environmentally
friendly, such as using biodegradable

materials
instead
of plastic packaging, they can
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help
to
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reduce
waste at a mass level.

These examples illustrate the sphere of
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influence
that
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government
officials and large

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companies
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have to
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improve
our environment.

On the other hand
, I feel that every individual is
also
is capable of making conscious

choice and taking steps to protect our
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environment
.
For example
, if one chooses to

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use
recyclable bags
instead
of disposable plastic bags, he or she can
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help
to save

over 100 plastic bags each year.
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socialize
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often
, and can
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influence
others

actions through modelling
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positive
and
environmentally
conscious
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behaviours
. Even

though these actions may seem insignificant in the short term, the collective efforts

can have a huge
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influence
in time to
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come
.

In conclusion
, I
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agree
that the
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government
and
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big
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companies
exert strong influences

on our
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environment
wellness through executing policies,
as well
as through the

manufacturing of
environmentally
friendly consumer products.
However
, I
also


believe that individuals have the capacity to exert personal choices and
potentially


influence their friends to protect the
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environment
in the long-term trajectory
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IELTS essay Eventually, the examples here provided proved how powerful individual’s actions are over government policies, and how impactful these could be for the next generations.

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5 paragraphs
307 words
6.5
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