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Are you agree or disagree with idea of "Tourism rarely benefits the countries which tourists visit".

Are you agree or disagree with idea of "Tourism rarely benefits the countries which tourists visit". m8N8d
Tourism industry had an enormously growth over these years. Does the tourism had a real benefits? Form my point of view, tourism is a double-edges sword. It would give a plenty of benefits for economy. In contrast, without good regulations, it could be harmful. I strongly agree that it quite not benefits for Thai people. The most significant reason is problem which Thai people called a “Zero spend tour”. There are plenty of tourism companies are from China. They offer Chinese people a budget Thailand tour. Restaurant, store, bus driver, Guide, Cruise all belong to their company. Only few local business take part in their program. Furthermore they not allow the traveller to buy or take merchandise which not from their store onto the bus and lie that these goods will not be permit to be taken out from Thailand. This is the major trouble which threat Thailand economics system. Secondly, after the gigantic expansion of tourism, Thailand economy now depended too much on tourism. Government have no good policy and plan for develop a secured economy. When the incoming of COVID-19, world was shutdown and travel was restricted. Numerous business in Thailand were bankrupted, in the fact that they depend themselves too much on offshore traveller. In addition, after local business were out, there are influx of Chinese funds takeover these enterprise. Finally, this problem will repeated the first problem. In conclusion, Thailand had lose a lot from terrible tourism management of Government. I agree that it is a dis advantage of tourism blooming in Thailand.
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industry had an
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enormously growth
over these years. Does the
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tourism
had a real benefits? Form my point of view,
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tourism
is a double-edges sword. It would give a
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plenty
of benefits for economy.
In contrast
, without
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good
regulations, it could be harmful. I
strongly
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agree
that it quite not benefits for Thai
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people
.

The most significant reason is problem which Thai
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people
called a “Zero spend tour”. There are
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plenty
of
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tourism
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companies
are from China. They offer Chinese
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people
a budget Thailand tour. Restaurant, store, bus driver, Guide, Cruise all belong to their
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company
.
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Only
few local business
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take part
in their program.
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Furthermore
they not
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allow
the
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traveller
to
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buy
or take merchandise which not from their store onto the bus and lie that these
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goods
will not be
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permit
to
be taken
out from Thailand. This is the major trouble which threat Thailand economics system.

Secondly
, after the gigantic expansion of
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tourism
, Thailand economy
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now
depended too much on
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tourism
.
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Government
Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: "has".
have
no
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good
policy and plan for develop a secured economy. When the incoming of COVID-19, world was shutdown and travel
was restricted
. Numerous business in Thailand
were bankrupted
, in the fact that they depend themselves too much on offshore
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traveller
.

In addition
, after local business were out, there are
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influx
of Chinese funds takeover
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these enterprise
.
Finally
, this problem will
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repeated
the
first
problem.

In conclusion
, Thailand had
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lose
a lot from terrible
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tourism
management of
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Government
. I
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agree
that it is a dis advantage of
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tourism
blooming in Thailand.
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IELTS essay Are you agree or disagree with idea of "Tourism rarely benefits the countries which tourists visit".

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  American English
5 paragraphs
257 words
6.0
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