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Event that you've been in before

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If you are in live with colors, it is impossible for you to have not heard of the 'Festival of Colors'. Definitely, it is one of the most attractive events in the whole world. Luckily, I engaged in the event last year. Witnessing all the colors was a breathtaking experience for me. I was surrounded by crowd and could feel the positive vibes surrounding me. I am not a fan of crowded places but this time was different. One of the most interesting things, was a group of Indians dancing and singing with ear-catching voices. The only problem for me was the hot weather. The sun was burning and I felt defenseless against it. Almost everyone had put on sunscreen, and I was the only person who had not. However, the event was so catching that the joy outweighed the pain. Next time I want to prepare for this event in advance and will not forget to put on sunscreen all over my skin.
If you are in
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with colors, it is impossible for you to have not heard of the 'Festival of Colors'. Definitely, it is one of the most attractive
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in the whole world. Luckily, I engaged in the
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event
last year.

Witnessing all the colors was a breathtaking experience for me. I
was surrounded
by crowd and could feel the
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positive
vibes surrounding me. I am not a fan of crowded places
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but
this time was
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different
. One of the most interesting things, was a group of Indians dancing and singing with ear-catching voices.

The
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only
problem for me was the hot weather. The sun was burning and I felt defenseless against it. Almost everyone had put on sunscreen, and I was the
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only
person who had not.
However
, the
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event
was
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so
catching that the joy outweighed the pain.

Next
time I want to prepare for this
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event
in advance and will not forget to put on sunscreen all over my skin.
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IELTS essay Event that you've been in before

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  American English
4 paragraphs
164 words
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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