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Essay topics: TPO-41 - Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

Essay topics: TPO-41 - Independent Writing Task Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
There are certain considerations or factors which everyone can take into account to investigate and examine how estimation of teachers' work in contemporary society has changed over time. I certainly believe that nowadays educators are less appreciated and valued by public than they used to be. Someone can consciously weigh the pros and cons of each side. The explanations go as follows. Firstly, a role of education and knowledge has slumped tremendously at the end of the twenty century. Since the technological revolution of XIX century the role of education was enormous and it was widely and unquestionably associated with lucrative work and a possibility to get a better life. In fact, a person with a college degree surely was able to find a job and his income was up to ten times higher than one of an average farmer. However, today this connection has weakened because people can witness that a diploma or a college degree does not automatically lead to employment and other benefits. Thus the role of educators who used to be seen as a key to a better life has lost its value. Secondly, in the past teachers were perceived as only available source of knowledge. In fact, in the past there was no obvious options, if you want to get a new skill, profession or knowledge, you will have to pay attention to your teacher who by default knows the subject better then you. Additionally to it, there was a shortage of good textbooks and they were really expensive. Today information, knowledge is widely available and cheap. In fact, a person with a laptop may unearth all needed data on-line and in no costs. Admittedly, there are some justifications by one who argues that teachers' work is more appreciated by the today' s society than it was in the past. Chiefly, this stance is made by people from rural and removed areas who claim that teachers are respected and prized by the locals. However, still I affirm that the attitude to educators has worsen in average because even in those rural areas the attitude to teachers will alter after such modern technology as the internet, computers, which currently unavailable in some regions, will arrive to the remote areas. Due to aforementioned ground, the attitude to teachers' role in contemporary society has surely worsened and in average people are prone to appreciate their toil less than in the past.
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changed
over time. I
certainly
believe that nowadays educators are less appreciated and valued by public than they
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used
to be. Someone can
consciously
weigh the pros and cons of each side. The explanations go as follows.

Firstly
, a
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role
of education and
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knowledge
has slumped
tremendously
at the
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end
of the twenty century. Since the technological revolution of XIX century the
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role
of education was enormous and it was
widely
and
unquestionably
associated with lucrative work and a possibility to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a better life. In fact, a person with a college degree
surely
was able to find a job and his income was up to ten times higher than one of an average farmer.
However
,
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today
this connection has weakened
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because
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people
can witness that a diploma or a college degree does not
automatically
lead to employment and other benefits.
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Thus
the
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role
of educators
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who
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used
to be
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seen
as a key to a better life has lost its value.

Secondly
, in the
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past
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teachers
were perceived
as
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only
available source of
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knowledge
. In fact, in the
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past
there was no obvious options, if you want to
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get
a new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
, profession or
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knowledge
, you will
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have to
pay attention to your
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teacher
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who
by default knows the subject
Did you mean "better than"?
better then
you.
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Additionally
to it, there was a shortage of
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good
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textbooks and
they were
really
expensive.
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Today
information,
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knowledge
is
widely
available and
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cheap
. In fact, a person with a laptop may unearth all needed data on-line and in no costs.

Admittedly
, there are
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some
justifications by one
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who
argues that
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teachers&
#039; work is more appreciated by the
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today&
#039; s society than it was in the
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past
.
Chiefly
, this stance
is made
by
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people
from rural and removed areas
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who
claim that
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teachers
are respected
and prized by the locals.
However
,
still
I affirm that the attitude to educators has
Use past participle here: "worsened".
worsen
in average
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because
even in those rural areas the attitude to
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teachers
will alter after such modern technology as the internet, computers, which
currently
unavailable in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
regions, will arrive to the remote areas.

Due to aforementioned ground, the attitude to
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teachers&
#039;
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role
in contemporary society has
surely
worsened and in average
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are prone to appreciate their toil less than in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
past
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Essay topics: TPO-41 - Independent Writing Task Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
403 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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