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Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

Task Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
Drug addiction is a severe problem faced in majority of youngsters these days. Some people think that the drug addicts should be treated as criminals, whereas others feel that they should be given proper treatment just like other ailing patients. This is a debatable argument, however this essay will discuss about both the views and my opinion on how we should handle drug addicts. As we know, that drugs are harmful for our health which causes many diseases, like lung cancer, mental disorders and many more. In my opinion, the drug addicts should be treated as other patients so that they can recover from the disease in time. It is very difficult to get rid of any of the addictions, so if a person is suffering from it, he should be given proper support from the doctors or any other health centres that can help them to get away from the addiction. Drugs are the costliest addiction because of which many people commit crime like theft to buy the drugs. Also, it is illegal in most of the countries the government has banned it already so that it is out of reach from the general public. In many countries, the government has made strict laws and heavy penalties against it so that they can completely demolish the intake of drugs. To conclude, the government should create awareness about the harmful effects of drugs and make strict rules against it. But, keeping in mind about the difficulty of leaving any sort of addiction, they should be given proper treatment against it to save their lives.
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Drug
addiction is a severe problem faced in
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majority of
youngsters these days.
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Some
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people
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think
that the
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drug
addicts should
be treated
as criminals, whereas others feel that they should be
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given
proper treatment
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just
like
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other
ailing patients. This is a debatable argument,
however
this essay will
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discuss about both
the views and my opinion on how we should handle
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drug
addicts.

As we know, that
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drugs
are harmful for our health which causes
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many
diseases, like lung cancer, mental disorders and
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many
more. In my opinion, the
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drug
addicts should
be treated
as
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other
patients
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so
that they can recover from the disease in time. It is
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very
difficult to
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get
rid
Consider simply using "of" instead.
of any of
the addictions,
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so
if a person is suffering from it, he should be
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given
proper support from the doctors or any
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other
health
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centres
that can
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help
them to
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get
away from the addiction.

Drugs are the costliest addiction
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because
of which
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many
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people
commit crime like theft to
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buy
the
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drugs
.
Also
, it is illegal in most of the countries the
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government
has banned it already
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so
that it is out of reach from the
Consider using "public".
general public
. In
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many
countries, the
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government
has made strict laws and heavy penalties against it
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so
that they can completely demolish the intake of drugs.

To conclude
, the
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government
should create awareness about the harmful effects of
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drugs
and
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make
strict
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rules
against it.
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But
, keeping in mind about the difficulty of leaving any sort of addiction, they should be
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given
proper treatment against it to save their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
.
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IELTS essay Task Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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