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Essay topics: The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant v.1

Essay topics: The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
There is a school of thought favours to live, and enjoy in places with hot weather, whereas others prefer to settle in low temperature places. From my perspective, it is more enjoyable to live in semi- and tropical places as it has an upsurge of things to see and visit and much more, it less likely risks human lives with extreme illnesses such as cold and flu. Having a life in hot weather is full of fun and amusement. In the tropical environment, greenery is widespread, most of flowing plants bloom, and diverse of animals inhabit the area. Hence, people inhabit tropical places will have a lot of scenery to enjoy sighting. Furthermore, hot weather less likely risks inhabitants to extreme diseases, which are mostly associated with coldness. To easily illustrate, there is an upsurge of migrants tend more to continue their life in Australia due to the moderate weather and diverse natural sceneries, thus having several places to visit and sight with a healthier lifestyle. On the other hand, cold weather places are more favourable to live in, according to some people. This is because polar or near polar places are where to indulge in the real meaning of silence, which is by far ridiculous as later on, life will be quite tedious and boring with barren lands bearing nothing to explore. Not only that, but also life in extremely low temperature, like that in Canada, more likely endangers populace's life with deadly flu. To sum up, although it is preferable by some people to live in cold places to enjoy the real meaning of silence, it will be by far boring and probably cause deadly illnesses. Therefore, life in hot areas is favourable by most, including me, as it holds a lot of scenery to sight and discover, and more importantly, it is more likely safer for human health.
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live
, and enjoy in
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places
with hot
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weather
, whereas others prefer to settle in low temperature
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places
. From my perspective, it is more enjoyable to
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live
in semi- and tropical
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places
as it has an upsurge of things to
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see
and visit and much more, it less
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likely
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risks
human
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lives
with extreme illnesses such as
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cold
and flu.

Having a
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life
in hot
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weather
is full of fun and amusement. In the tropical environment, greenery is widespread,
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most of flowing
plants bloom, and diverse of animals inhabit the area.
Hence
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people
inhabit tropical
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will have
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a lot of
scenery to enjoy sighting.
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, hot
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less
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inhabitants to extreme diseases, which are
mostly
associated with coldness. To
easily
illustrate, there is an upsurge of migrants
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more to continue their
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life
in Australia due to the moderate
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weather
and diverse natural sceneries,
thus
having several
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places
to visit and sight with a healthier lifestyle.

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,
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cold
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weather
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places
are more
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in, according to
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. This is
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polar or near polar
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places
are where to indulge in the real meaning of silence, which is by far ridiculous as later on,
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life
will be quite tedious and boring with barren lands bearing nothing to explore. Not
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that,
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also
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life
in
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low temperature, like that in Canada, more
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endangers populace's
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life
with deadly flu.

To sum up, although it is preferable by
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some
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people
to
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live
in
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cold
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places
to enjoy the real meaning of silence, it will be by far boring and
probably
cause deadly illnesses.
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,
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life
in hot areas is
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favourable
by most, including me, as it holds
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a lot of
scenery to sight and discover, and more
importantly
, it is more
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likely
safer for human health.
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IELTS essay Essay topics: The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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