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Environmentol problems such os porrufion ond climotic votiolions ore increosing nowodoys. The governmenls hove foken sorne rneosures ol o gtobot level. Bul they got only few sorufions. Why is il so? How con lhis problem be solved?

Environmentol problems such os porrufion ond climotic votiolions ore increosing nowodoys. The governmenls hove foken sorne rneosures ol o gtobot level. Bul they got only few sorufions. Why is il so? How con lhis problem be solved? OVeky
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performance builds community. There's never going to be anything

like sitting in a theater with hundreds of
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people
around you who value what you value. The appeal of
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performance
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whole day at times. Despite the fact that
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has and edge over it all,
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it has made arts

accessible to all regardless of geographical, social or economic
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IELTS essay Environmentol problems such os porrufion ond climotic votiolions ore increosing nowodoys. The governmenls hove foken sorne rneosures ol o gtobot level. Bul they got only few sorufions. Why is il so? How con lhis problem be solved?

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