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environment problems facing today's world little ordinary people improve situation government and large companies should responsible for reducing the amount damage v.1

environment problems facing today's world little ordinary people improve situation government and large companies should responsible for reducing the amount damage v. 1
According to some, a device which reduces human work and advanced technology connected equipment's are adding complexity to human activity. Whereas some, thinks that these devices make our activity easier. Common people like housewife and international students are greatly benefited by using these technologies. To begin with, household appliances have been playing a vital role in sharing manual work and saves time. Especially, home makers are loaded with lots of activities, end up with physical and mental exhausted state which makes them difficult to balance their family and personal needs. But, when they are using modern equipment's like as dishwasher, microwave oven, washing machine etc. , they could save energy and time to use it for their much needed activity such as spending memorable moments with children's or personal grooming activities. Those quality hours in-turns make them feel relaxed and refreshed. A recent study conducted by the health care department in India stated that less workload gradually reduces up-to 50% of the cortisol level production. Another important sector where technology is considered as a boon is in communication, helps to connect people from various countries regardless of boundaries. In olden days, people who want to travel abroad are away from their family for different purpose such as study or work, find it very difficult to communicate back and eventually fall on home sick. But, now-a-days with the help of advanced technology such as mobile phone enabled with internet makes it possible to connect visually and for cheaper prices. So, this makes their life easier and stress free. In conclusion, even though advancement had some minor drawback, advance technologies paves the way to live a stress-free life and save time and energy.
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some
, a device which
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reduces
human work and advanced
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technology
connected equipment's are adding complexity to human
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activity
. Whereas
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some
,
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thinks
that these devices
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make
our
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activity
easier. Common
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people
like housewife and international students are
greatly
benefited by using these technologies.

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begin
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home makers
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activities
,
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end
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makes
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they could save energy and time to
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use
it for their
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activity
such as spending memorable moments with children's or personal grooming
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activities
. Those quality hours in-turns
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make
them feel relaxed and refreshed. A recent study conducted by the health care department in India stated that less workload
gradually
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reduces
up-to 50% of the cortisol level production.

Another
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important
sector where
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technology
is considered
as a boon is in communication,
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helps
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people
from various countries regardless of boundaries. In olden days,
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people
who want to travel abroad are away from their family for
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difficult to communicate back and
eventually
fall on home sick.
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,
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now
-a-days with the
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help
of advanced
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technology
such as mobile phone enabled with internet
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makes
it possible to connect
visually
and for cheaper prices.
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So
, this
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makes
their life easier and
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stress
free.

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,
even though
advancement had
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some
minor drawback, advance
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technologies
paves the way to
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live
a
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stress
-free life and save time and energy.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay environment problems facing today's world little ordinary people improve situation government and large companies should responsible for reducing the amount damage v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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