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Employment Sector in China

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China is a booming country in terms of development. From the last decade, china acquired astonishing growth in GDP, Health sector and human development Index. Even though China is still considered a developing country due to per capita. The population plays a great role in decreasing their per head per capita. China ranks number 2 in population with an amount of 100 core population. But things are totally different if we bring the total GDP of china. It is a trillion-dollar economy that leads from the front. The USA was a leader in GDP for decades but things are changing. Now china has overtaken the USA with a whopping trillion dollar difference.
China is a booming country in terms of development. From the last decade, china acquired astonishing growth in GDP, Health sector and
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developing country
due to per capita. The population plays a great role in decreasing their per head per capita. China ranks number 2 in population with an amount of 100 core population.
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if we bring the total GDP of china. It is a trillion-dollar economy that leads from the front. The USA was a leader in GDP for decades
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things are changing.
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china has overtaken the USA with a whopping trillion dollar difference.
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IELTS essay Employment Sector in China

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
112 words
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