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Employers should focus on personal qualities over qualifications and experience when choosing someone for job. Yo what extent do you agree with this?

Employers should focus on personal qualities over qualifications and experience when choosing someone for job. Yo what extent do you agree with this? amY7
It is irrefutably true that selecting a perfect candidate for job has become hard nut to crack for employers in the contemporary era, Therefore some individuals of the society admit that personal trait can be taken as a major factor while hiring employees rather than education and experience. However, I think background qualification and experience play an indispensable role in requiting process, and this essay will be discussed reason behind this choices. To begin with, every student do study in order to gain theoretical and practical knowledge which would be need to get good job and these qualities are an over edge on the personal trait. If a person wants to apply for job he/she will need certain type of qualification to apply for job as compared to personal trait due to having both knowledge. Moreover, some requiter require exposure and advance study to complete the demand of job such as doctors, professional engineer and so on, most employer want to higher of those person who have a hands on experience in certain type of field. In addition, all management positions need exposure qualifications and greatly experience personnel. To cite an example, according to survey, it has been observed that 60% compines has been closed down in the Nigeria owing to their management were inexperienced workers. Last but not least, personal trait will not opt choice unless a person have good communication skills, in other words, good communication skills are required in all field, education and experience not only enhance the communication skills but also provide a certificate which would be used in order to get job in the multinational companies. On the contrary, if only personal qualities are considered, it would be difficult to select individuals who are capable as everyone would claim to exhibit the required properties. In conclusion, given after mentioned all information, it is abundantly clear that although, personal trait play crucial rule in hiring process, experience and exposure study should be considered as a major factor while this process. Therefore, I strongly disagree with the fact that personal characteristics should be focused on instead of degrees and achievements during employment.
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true that selecting a perfect candidate for
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some
individuals of the society admit that
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personal
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trait
can
be taken
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rather
than education and
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experience
.
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, I
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think
background qualification and
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play an indispensable role in requiting process, and this essay will
be discussed
reason behind
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with, every student do study in order to gain theoretical and practical knowledge which would
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good
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and these qualities are an over edge on the
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trait
. If a person wants to apply for
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job
he/she will need certain type of qualification to apply for
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as compared to
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due to having both knowledge.
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,
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require exposure and advance study to complete the demand of
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such as doctors, professional engineer and
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on, most employer want to higher of
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in certain type of field.

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greatly
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experience
personnel. To cite an example, according to survey, it has
been observed
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compines
has
been closed
down in the Nigeria owing to their management
were inexperienced
workers. Last
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not least,
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personal
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will not opt choice unless a person have
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good
communication
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experience
not
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enhance the communication
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in the multinational
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personal
qualities
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, it would be difficult to select individuals who are capable as everyone would claim to exhibit the required properties.

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play crucial
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in hiring process,
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experience
and exposure study should
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strongly
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characteristics should
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IELTS essay Employers should focus on personal qualities over qualifications and experience when choosing someone for job. Yo what extent do you agree with this?

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