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Employers should focus on personal qualities over qualifications and experience when choosing someone for a job. To what extent do you agree with this? v.2

Employers should focus on personal qualities over qualifications and experience when choosing someone for a job. v. 2
It is often considered by many that while recruiting an employees, the company should consider personal qualities such as person who have good team work ideas and excellent communication skills which are useful to raise the productivity of the company, instead of focusing on degree certificates and years of experience. i completely agree with the statement. To begin, there are number of reasons to argue that personal skills are indespensible while recruiting an employee to an organization's. Firstly, workers who have good team work qualities would be more advantageous. in other words, a good team work pave the way for better decisions and leads to achieve more productivity which helps companies to grow at higher level and also boost the economic status of the country. For instance, a recent survey conducted by Infosys foundation shows that team work is the key for thier success. Thus, person who have personal skills like good team work would certainly beneficial for the company. Secondly, personal qualities including good communication skills would better to consider while conducting job interview. This is to say that, this helps employees to achieve their target with no time because nowadays most of the jobs require a person having good rapport which leads them to reach their goals. For example, a recent survey conducted by a pharmaceutical company in Bangladesh reported that a medical representative with excellent interpersonal relationship with medical practitioner resulted 100 percent success in thier job. Therefore, rather than qualifications and experiences, companies should focus on personal skills which are useful tool for achieving goals. To conclude, when companies or any organization's recruiting people for a job, they must pay attention to workers personal skills such as communication skills and team work which are basic tool to boost countries economy and productivity of the company rather than considering academic marks sheet and experiences.
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often
considered by
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many
that while recruiting
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an employees
, the
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company
should consider
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personal
qualities such as person who have
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good
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team
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work
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ideas
and excellent communication
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skills
which are useful to raise the productivity of the
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company
,
instead
of focusing on degree certificates and years of experience.
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i
completely
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agree
with the statement.

To
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begin
, there are number of reasons to argue that
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personal
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skills
are
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indespensible
while recruiting an employee to an organization's.
Firstly
, workers who have
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good
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team
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work
qualities would be more advantageous.
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in
other words, a
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good
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team
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work
pave the way for better decisions and leads to achieve more productivity which
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helps
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companies
to grow at higher level and
also
boost the economic status of the country.
For instance
, a recent survey conducted by
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Infosys
foundation
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shows
that
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team
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work
is the key for
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thier
success.
Thus
, person who have
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personal
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skills
like
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good
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team
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work
would
certainly
beneficial for the
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company
.

Secondly
,
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personal
qualities including
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good
communication
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skills
would better to consider while conducting
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job
interview. This is to say that, this
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helps
employees to achieve their target with no time
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because
nowadays most of the
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jobs
require a person having
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good
rapport which leads them to reach their goals.
For example
, a recent survey conducted by a pharmaceutical
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company
in Bangladesh reported that a medical representative with excellent interpersonal relationship with medical practitioner resulted 100 percent success in
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thier
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job
.
Therefore
,
rather
than qualifications and experiences,
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companies
should focus on
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personal
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skills
which are useful tool for achieving goals.

To conclude
, when
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companies
or any organization's recruiting
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people
for a
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job
, they
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must
pay attention to workers
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personal
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skills
such as communication
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skills
and
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team
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work
which are basic tool to boost countries economy and productivity of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
rather
than considering academic marks sheet and experiences.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Employers should focus on personal qualities over qualifications and experience when choosing someone for a job. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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