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Employers should focus on personal qualities over qualifications and experience when choosing someone for a job. To what extent do you agree with this? v.1

Employers should focus on personal qualities over qualifications and experience when choosing someone for a job. v. 1
Nowadays, there are some companies that do not need any resumes of the job applicants. They choose their employees based on interview and psychological test results to analyse personal potentials. Some people support this phenomenon because personal qualities should be prioritised than personal qualifications and experience. In this essay, I shall provide my opinion on why I agree with this statement. To begin with, people can exaggerate their work experience in their resumes while the interview and psychological test results never lie. The other reason of using the above mentioned selection method is to look at personal qualities over qualifications and experience. It is because personal qualifications can be trained and improved and then personal experience can be gained by working in some related projects while employers cannot do anything about personal characteristics, namely honesty, loyalty, and responsibility. For example, it is useless for a company to provide expensive trainings for their workers if they are not loyal. This is the reason why companies need employers to sign a contract in order to keep those people working there after training sessions. Nonetheless, there are some people who still disobey this rule and agreement. Another example is that there are some cases when people have great resumes and work experience but cause financial loss to the company because they are dishonest and do corruption. In conclusion, I believe employers should hire employees considering their personal qualities over their personal qualifications and experience because qualifications can be trained and experience can be gained while personal qualities are related to their identity and characteristics in which no one can change them.
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companies
that do not need any resumes of the job applicants. They choose their employees based on interview and psychological
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test
results to
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analyse
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personal
potentials.
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people
support this phenomenon
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because
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personal
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qualities
should be
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prioritised
than
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personal
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qualifications
and
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experience
. In this essay, I shall provide my opinion on why I
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people
can exaggerate their work
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experience
in their resumes while the interview and psychological
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results never lie. The other reason of using the above mentioned selection method is to look at
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personal
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qualities
over
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qualifications
and
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experience
. It is
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personal
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be trained
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improved
and then
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personal
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experience
can
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by working in
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related projects while employers cannot do anything about
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personal
characteristics,
namely
honesty, loyalty, and responsibility.
For example
, it is useless for a
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company
to provide expensive trainings for their workers if they are not loyal. This is the reason why
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companies
need employers to
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sign
a contract in order to
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keep
those
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people
working there after training sessions. Nonetheless, there are
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people
who
still
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and agreement. Another example is that there are
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cases when
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people
have great resumes and work
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experience
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but
cause financial loss to the
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company
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because
they are dishonest and do corruption.

In conclusion
, I believe employers should hire employees considering their
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personal
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qualities
over their
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personal
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qualifications
and
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experience
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because
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qualifications
can
be trained
and
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experience
can
be gained
while
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personal
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qualities
are related
to their identity and characteristics in which no one can
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change
them.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Employers should focus on personal qualities over qualifications and experience when choosing someone for a job. v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
268 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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