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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home? v.2

In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home? v. 2
In some countries, it is thought by some people that renting a home is more preferable than purchasing them. People can easily move from one apartment to another if they are renting their houses, but there are also drawbacks to be taken into account. Firstly, one evident benefit of renting an apartment is that people can relocate more easily for work or even they can downsize when money is short. For example, workers are exposed to different opportunities in their field of works, and they always are dreaming about the work that will give them a high salary, and therefore, renting a home will facilitate the resettlement. Secondly, renting a house would be advantageous because it is more economical than buying a house. In this case, people are not obligated to borrow money from banks to pay their monthly mortgage payments. Thirdly, the landlord is utterly responsible for repairs and maintenance, not the tenant. To cite an example, I was living in a renting apartment last year, and the air conditioner showed some anomalies. As a result, I emailed the landlord to send one of their technicians to fix it. Otherwise, if I owned the apartment; I will be responsible for any repairs because I am the real owner of the house. On the other hand, one problem of renting a house is that the tenant would not be able to renovate and decorate the property. To put it another way, the decoration of the walls sometimes is too old, and to remove it, the tenant needs prior permission from the owner, as it makes you feel that you do not have a free will to do what you want with your home. Another possible issue is that renting a house makes the tenant unsecured because the landlord can ask the resident to leave the property at any time. For instance, one of my neighbors was asked to move from his apartment by the owner because he was late in paying the rent, and the landlord did not give him any time even to find another apartment. Finally, the rent will increase every year because home prices are changing drastically from year to another due to the high demands of buying houses. Consequently, people who are renting homes will be forced to move frequently, and this will lead to instabilities. In conclusion, while people can benefit from renting a home, it can also lead to insecurity and instability to the tenant.
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thought
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people
that
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renting
a home is more preferable than purchasing them.
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can
easily
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move
from one
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apartment
to another if they are
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renting
their
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houses
,
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but
there are
also
drawbacks to
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Firstly
, one evident benefit of
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renting
an
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apartment
is that
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people
can relocate more
easily
for work or even they can downsize when money is short.
For example
, workers
are exposed
to
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different
opportunities in their field of works, and they
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always are
dreaming about the work that will give them a high salary, and
therefore
,
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renting
a home will facilitate the resettlement.
Secondly
,
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renting
a
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house
would be advantageous
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because
it is more economical than buying a
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house
.
In this case
,
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people
are not obligated to borrow money from banks to pay their monthly mortgage payments.
Thirdly
, the
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landlord
is
utterly
responsible for repairs and maintenance, not the
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tenant
. To cite an example, I was living in a
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renting
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apartment
last year, and the air conditioner
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showed
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some
anomalies.
As a result
, I emailed the
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landlord
to
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send
one of their technicians to
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fix
it.
Otherwise
, if I
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owned
the
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apartment
; I will be responsible for any repairs
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because
I am the real owner of the
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house
.

On the other hand
, one problem of
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renting
a
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house
is that the
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tenant
would not be able to renovate and decorate the property. To put it another way, the decoration of the walls
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sometimes
is too
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old
, and to remove it, the
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tenant
needs prior permission from the owner, as it
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makes
you feel that you do not have a free will to do what you want with your home. Another possible issue is that
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renting
a
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house
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makes
the
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tenant
unsecured
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because
the
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landlord
can ask the resident to
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leave
the property at any time.
For instance
, one of my neighbors
was asked
to
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move
from his
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apartment
by the owner
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because
he was late in paying the rent, and the
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landlord
did not give him any time even to find another
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apartment
.
Finally
, the rent will increase every year
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because
home prices are changing
drastically
from year to another due to the high demands of buying
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houses
.
Consequently
,
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people
who are
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renting
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homes
will
be forced
to
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move
frequently
, and this will lead to instabilities.

In conclusion
, while
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people
can benefit from
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renting
a home, it can
also
lead to insecurity and instability to the
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tenant
.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
411 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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